Black Poetry : IF "I"

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    If i let my petals unfurl
    upon the glist of tomorrow
    at your gleamming light
    through your warm smile
    would you my beloved
    let me bloom and blossome

    If i awaken in da shadows
    of dry forest in need, thirsting
    in pain and my soul had a need
    dropplets of love
    would you rain on me sweet dew
    of comfort and allow my spirit
    to shine just as bright

    If i drove miles in search for ya love
    or into a path of nowhere & doubts
    would you humblely come save me
    guide me and love me as i do you !
    or if i spread my sooted insecurities
    of my past before you along the
    rocky shores , will there be any hope
    of us as one love

    My heart still calls your name inside
    this exsistance and the depth of reasons
    where i loom in the spool of compassion
    feeling your very soul the spirit warmth
    how do i canvas this feeling u leave
    upon the heart of a man i ask in the eyes
    of God will i be sold or hit by the sword

    If i my Queen of thy lands
    which was created by hands
    through depth and passion
    my loyality and reality in the stilliness
    of tomorrow relinquished all titles, all power
    all influence and left the doors to my heart
    open would you come inside the domain
    to meet me so that i exist with you
    and share my all in the mist of your realism
    that you now called your own temple

    At the alter would you welcome me by hand
    join together as woman & man
    fulfill as i and make a stand to share your world
    can you compromise me thy heart as well
    in return spiritrually , mentally & physically
    and if i jump in the ink of blackness under protective
    absolute trusting will my emotions not be wilt
    or my everything betrayed

    For my love is like glass
    will you carry me to the Oasis
    shhhhh! allow yaself tyme to think
    my beloveth , i loveth thee .:heart:
    :hearts2: :hearts1: :hearts2: :hearts1:

    yours Truely
    Da $R​
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this reminds me of Jesse Powell song called If I

    here's a little snippet for you you know how i love to incorporate songs n2 my comments so here goes.

    Boy If I
    If I should lose you boy
    If I
    Cant make love to you
    then I dont know what I gonna do!!!!!

    well that isnt all of it but you get the picture if you heard of him.
    this is a nice write
    If I didnt know no betta I swear you forgot about me being your valentine or not its around the corner. I dont have no date so what do you say you leaving me leaving me in the cold with my red dress on with red shoes hair done smelling like vanilla what you say gurl is there a period in there
    ok.:blowkiss: :blowkiss:
     
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    Very Beautiful Piece
    That was a hot piece
    Really liked this one
    Brother $$RICH$$
    I see the depth of your pen
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dam Rich, I have never seen a male poet be so in depth with his passion.
    Most of the time they speak about sex which is easy to do.
    I can tell your writing is real!
    Please flow on, your poetry heals a broken heart!
    Loved this piece!!!!!!!
     
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    Aaliyahmonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was very sweet and indeed romantique.:)

    1 luv,

    AM
     
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    Thank u Nevar i feel u , If i was created from this emotion
    i felt last night my mind spool out and if i walked in so i pen
    it down much love sis......

    Thank u a million tyme my brutha Tantrum , happy u felt the
    depth of this spray i laid to canvas it was from heart & mind
    peace bruh !

    Cursed heart it is my warmth of deep pleasure sista
    and i vow to reach and mend the broken that has been
    betrayed by many of my bruthas of the past what is pen
    is real from the depth of my heart and emotions thank u.

    ahhhh!! Aaliyahmonet through my soul of compassion i try
    and hope from the romantic side is felt to say love is alive
    thank u so much .

    y'all are wonderful and a great support that gives me hope and keep me
    going reaching for that star , surely my name is on one thank you all.....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Talk about a modern day Romeo. This is a type of scribe that can make a heart cry. If presented with this, I'm sure your beloveth would say yes, it flowed so genuinely.
     
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    ahhhh! yes watz maybe one day i'll reach that standard of a Romeo
    smiling !
    I also hope it reach the heart of it's exsistance i truely Thank u my sweet.
     
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    If i give my all
    will i stand
    if i open my heart
    will it be broken
    If i lone
    will u give
    If i
    If u may
    just love me
     
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    Of course I read this a few times over a few days. I liked it the first time and loved it even more the last time i read it.

    A different angle to a prolific writer of love notes or should i say erotic passions of pen

    well it is kewl that you can also write longer pieces that keep the attention to the end

    So when you putting a book together Maestro

    Peace

    Patrice