Black Poetry : If I

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Placing me on hold
    wont let you feel my love…
    or is it you don’t have time…
    as you use to shine with me
    as my light goes dim….what the he77
    is goin on?
    got me twisting and turning
    wondering searching
    tryin to define…if we made
    a wrong turn
    as our good nights come
    less….and the talks well
    you know…if I could
    turn back the
    hands of time I would..
    but I cant…
    just know the hurt is
    getting stronger
    as my inside burns..
    boy meets girl
    girl falls for boy
    and they fall in love
    boy talk a good talk
    as girl giggles and
    talk right back
    emotions wrap in a knot
    but …..
    If I give you me
    Would that be enough?
    Or will it be misunderstood?
    See my heart sings of you
    As my spirit rejoice
    For what it have..
    But if I release me to you
    Would you feel me?
    Can you handle it?
    Or would you run?
    You talk of dreams together
    Or is it just a story
    to hurt me
    to use me
    to put me down..
    after you help me up
    to see a world that is not so cold
    but full of love…..
    You tell me when I need you
    Just call
    But if I call will you hear?
    Will you come?
    Would you make that time?
    Can you even love me back?
    Placing me on hold
    wont let you feel my love…
    if I give you me?
    Will my laughs turn in to tears?
    If I give you me?

    A blkangel thang
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice and smooth piece sis:)
    loving your flow
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for your
    support and love
    on dis my sister
    means alot
    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. SPIRITNORTH

    SPIRITNORTH Banned MEMBER

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    wrappin my arms around this one very good piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling ya here
    this was well done and said
    it will reach da mind of that one .
     
  6. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If he won't I would...

    I'm diggin' on this one.

    Nice.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is so well dropped, my sis. lovin the concept, the flow, everything.
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    that "blkangel thang" works..
    it flows...
    keep on doing it..."your thang"
     
  9. Justerika

    Justerika Active Member MEMBER

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    this peace cries
    each stanza full of tears
    great job poetess :crying: :fairy:
     
  10. poeticly_yours

    poeticly_yours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like

    I think your poem is real nice
    I like it, It's hot
    Keep up the flow