Black Poetry : If I Told You..

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  1. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    If I told you that your smile brightens my waking like the Aurora Borealis splashes sparkles by day
    And that your smoldering eyes bedazzle me at bed-time
    just as it streaks neon prisms at night

    If I told you that your arms wrapped around me
    are as strong and solid as the Cedars of Lebanon
    Or that your kiss is as sweet as Moroccan dates

    If I told you that your calm spirit engulfs me
    like thick fog over mountain ranges
    Or that your love, sometimes, strikes me mute with awe
    like miraculous rainbows

    If I told you these things, would you believe me
    as surely as your heart beats and the blood runs through your veins?
    If I told you these things,
    would you help me to count none of life’s losses and only the gains
    As we, together, live, learn, love and weather the storms of angers, disappointments and pains?

    If I told you?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    If you told him these thing .......yes he would smile in gleam
    If you told him , he would endure your words intently

    This was warm and fuzzy sis.

    AWESOME
     
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    Thank you very much, Rich!
     
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    I really love this, Cherry...

    The images your words invoke are mesmerizing at best.
    I can see myself reciting them to my love as he lay in my lap
    in a field under the moon & stars....ok, ok I went there....

    but only for a moment....lol.


    Beautifully done, poetess.


    e:heart:
     
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    Yeah, I see you feel me!

    When I wrote this one, I was kinda "having a moment!" :em2300:

    LOL!

    Thank you so much, Sister E!
     
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    "if i told you," indeed.

    yes, i would believe...if i was he.

    THANK YOU.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you much, Brother Baller! ;)
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i really, enjoyed this lovepiece, as well, cherry. i told you slowly becoming a fan. very nicely written.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    You still stuck in the "SLOW LANE?!" (lol) j/k


    Thanks a bunch, Bro LS!
     
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    very heartfelt and beautiful Sis

    May all your days be bright and warm
    For I know the essence of a woman scorned
    but maybe they're just lessons from high up above
    because really and truly we are all the children of LOVE
    And I could never keep LOVE just for myself
    It is something ONE always must feel for themself
    Because we all share within this notion of ONE
    all mothers, fathers, sisters, brothers, daughters and sons

    and many cograts on being the poet of the month.

    Much Love to you Sister
     
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