Black Poetry : If I had you at HELLO, the response (inspired by GA Sunshyne)

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I HAD you at hello
    then what about our former lives?
    when you were the sky and I was
    a cloud drifting as you stroked my
    silver lining? or when you
    were the candle and I was the flame
    that lit your wick and gave birth
    to smoke that spelled us as it danced
    to God's exhalations...we sho' got down
    or when you were the Nile river and
    I a Kemetic King soaking my feet
    after directing how the pyramids should
    be built...you felt good...so good
    that I dived in and let myself go
    to the point where I became one with you
    and we joined hands, lips, bodies, and
    spirits as we flowed North
    or when you were a glass and I chamomile
    tea and I swirled about you caressing your
    insides diving over your lip and settling at your
    base tickling your backside or when
    you were the Sun and I the moon and I eclipsed
    you so the world could not see what we
    did on the other
    side yet you teased them with the glow
    you released around my whole...
    or you the roots and I the soil
    and I sucked you dry or when you
    were the woman on a planet only
    you inhabited and I the gravitational
    pull holding you near me close to me
    next to me our privied proximity

    If I had you at hello then what about our former
    lives? when you the verse to a love poem
    and I the inflection that formed it the
    energy that flowed it smoothly
    off of lover's lips to one another.

    (c) 2001 blakverb
     
  2. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You Are da Bomb Bay-Beeee!!!

    VERB...

    when i told you i would be honored if
    you did a response to "You Had Me At Hello"...
    I didn't know you would leave me Mind Blown...
    yet again... but i shoulda known!! :wink:

    you are oh-so... just plain... indescribable...
    & guess what?... i almost fainted & i think i
    did do that otha thing!!! :lol:

    AlwaysLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
  3. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh SNAPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!

    I'm glad you like it queen. I think it needs a little work but you get the point.

    one love, blak

    I'm still working on that fainting thing. maybe with the re-write.
     
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    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...that OTHER thing huh ??? ( awww !! )

    My absolute fave part was when you were the tea, and
    she was the glass ----
    No Doubt, this was a nice supplement - a nice
    compliment - a fitting way to respond mos def.

    anotha banga from da' man !
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes Sir!!!

    The response was most def appropo Blak!!!

    Mental magnifico!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    Feelin

    I'm feelin this vibe fa sho. Yea,I get yo point. Flow on.
    Desert Storm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    VERB U JUST SET IT OFF IN A MOTION
    SUPER WORK OF ART....LOVIN IT.
     
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    BV what can I say dog... you makin em' faint up in hea...lol I dig the way you make those metaphors dance!

    this hea line was sick!

    if I had you at hello then what about our former
    lives? when you the verse to a love poem
    and I the inflection that formed it the
    energy that flowed it smoothly
    off of lover's lips to one another.


    Madd Respect Poet
    Reas
     
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    yes!!

    just basking in the heat of this!

    this scribe defies my feeble attempts at the exclamatory!

    A :)
     
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    Blak~

    It's gettin' hot...do I have a temperature??!!
    :)
    My body temperature just rose another 98.6 degrees
    wit dis ish hea!

    Blak~ you must be one of the talented 10th?!
    And I just sit here; sauteed, filet-of-soul
    is being served~~
     
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