Black Poetry : I'd Die For You...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is actually a song i wrote, so it doesn't really rhyme and flow like a poem...but what counts is the message.....

    so enjoy!




    VERSE 1:

    i remember those times like it was yesterday
    everything you used to do and the words you used to say
    you said you'd love me better, make this pain fade away
    but it feels as if you're deepening the pain
    now i don't wanna leave, i really wanna stay
    make love all night, and carress me sweet baby
    i know that you've probably heard this before
    but have you heard this?

    i'd die for you


    CHORUS:

    i never thought
    of fallin' for
    someone so hard

    that i'd die for you

    i never dreamed
    what it would mean
    to love someone so much

    that i'd die for you

    my Savior died for me one day
    that's how much he loved me
    so if i had to
    i'd die

    i'd die for you


    VERSE 2:

    you're so intriguing, but at the same time
    you make me feel unwanted
    but still
    i could talk and kiss you all the night long
    but
    i come home and i'm longin' for your love
    do you wanna leave or do you wanna stay?
    there's doubt that i need you forever as my baby
    so let me ask you one simple question
    baby

    would you die for me?


    (chorus again)


    HOOK:

    would you die for me?
    would you cry for me?
    would you give for me?

    or would you just...just leave?

    would you hold my hand?
    would you help me stand?
    would you wipe my tears?

    or would you run away in fear?

    cuz i would live for you
    and
    i would give for you
    and
    i would pray for you

    i would make things work
    make sure you're never hurt
    and baby

    I'D DIE FOR YOU...


    (then back to the chorus)




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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i like dis now the music and this ready
    tyte
     
  3. Zoya

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    WOW, I realy really really love this. Maybe because it reflects my inner turmoils and barage of questions...Would he love eternal?Sorry to tell you tho, he probably wouldn't die for any woman. Pessimistic as I may sound, I am lately finding that out. Men just wasn't bulit with that capability...and if you do find that one man...show him to me. We would need to preserve him for all eternity.

    Zoya
    this be sizzlin on tha mentals
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alot rich :)

    thanks so much zoya....this is a writin' from my past when i had completely given up on men...i have found the one that will die for me tho...and i'm sure that there are a few more out there that would risk there lives for the woman they love....

    ~lovely~
     
  5. Zoya

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    You're getting married!!!! Well congrats, maybe there is hope after all...All the best!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    I'd buy this too
    Mesmerized by you,
    I'd pine for you... :heart:
     
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    very beautiful write indeed!!!
    Peace to ya, LGO!
     
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    When is this song hittin the streets. I buy it too! Its beautiful!
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much zoya...i think there is hope after all....:)

    awwwwwww thats so sweet 1poetsought :)
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OOPS!! i forgot to thanks scrybe and purplemoons...

    scrybe thanks sooooo much for ur sweet compliment :)

    purplemoons i'm not sure when it'll ever hit the streets, but if i get famous as a singer like i want to, this would be my first single :)


    ~lovely~