Black Poetry : ~Iceberg~

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Mind~$oul, Aug 11, 2005.

  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can you picture this
    she's only 26, already with three kids
    another growing quietly in her stomach...
    that's four different fathers
    who left their traces...
    at the doorsteps...
    she says all men who can't
    take care of their kids
    are b*tches...
    but who taught her how to
    pick her men...?
    she's so desperate...
    for love, she makes the same mistakes
    over and over again...
    blaming her father's absence
    for her bandage heart and open legs...
    thinking love has to be the reason
    why he beats her senseless...
    "cause if he didn't care he
    wouldn't think to do this..."
    yeah he has you in check...
    your mind in his shackles
    bruises on your arm and wrist...
    the closest you'll ever get
    to the braclet you wanted...
    and to leave him will only
    be a suicide attempt...
    because your life is
    held in his closed fist...
    and he won't hesistate to crush it
    along with the next man you run off with...
    so your stuck with this ***** who is
    suffering from some obvious...
    inner emotional crisis...
    and when his insecurities relapses
    you're his only outlet...
    but the picture isn't painted perfect...
    it's not a blissful kiss...
    or making love under the mocking stars
    surrounded by murmuring winds...
    you're solely an outlet
    for his consistent back hand
    which only seems to satisfy him
    when your eyelids are swollen...
    and this **** only makes it 10x
    harder for those men...
    who go out of their way to treat women
    like a princess, queen, or goddess
    whatever their preference...
    men who will show them that angels
    aren't just those in heaven...
    but in humans...
    but for some reason they
    seem not to listen...
    and I gave up wasting time
    trying to convince them...
    truth hurts...
     
  2. Deepvoice

    Deepvoice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thats nice
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep yet felt tyte heavy scribe
     
  4. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a beautiful and inspirational work of art...and i wish that women could only understand their worth ....great flow....keep it coming
     
  5. angelicsage

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    I was just having a similar discussion with a friend
    yesterday and today.../ the cycle is deep

    ...and the children are the ones who truly suffer

    however, poetically....
    you put this down with all the introspection
    of wisdom that could possibly be packed into a poem
    your skill is always consistent and strong
    and the message equally so

    I could feel this
    Sage
     
  6. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :darts: it couldn't have been xpressed any clearer or passionately.

    may all women who have eyes see.

    tyte!!!!
     
  7. Auroraflower

    Auroraflower Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww...you posted it clear..


    yes i hear ya....



    my sister has been there ...

    only the praying helped ...

    to cast the demons away......






    i hear ya ..
    sad huh....



    keep on praying for her and believe in the highest and that he can liberate her..





    Loveauroraflower:heart:
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Until a person can see the obvious for themselves, there is nothing that anyone else can tell them, unfortunately. This was a potent drop poet.
     
  9. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    :bowdown: and STANDING OVATION! :toast:

    THIS is poetry that should be on billboards and on the sides of buses! Cuz a whole lotta women need to read this!

    EXCELLENT piece!


    And :birthday:
     
  10. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a very truthful scribe enjoyed it