Black Poetry : ~~~~~~ICE AND TEARS~~~~~~~~

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ICE...

    The feeling of a chilled
    heart.
    No sign of life.
    Nothing sparked.
    Feeling,
    but no feeling.
    Beating,
    but no beating.
    Drenched,
    but now dry...
    and desolate and
    cold.
    My chilled heart,
    impervious to feeling,
    immune to warmth of any kind.
    When you burn me once, you receive
    pure, unbreakable ice...
    Can it be melted?
    This remains to be seen.
    Breathing,
    pure strands of Artic coldness from
    my mouth.
    My whispers freeze in midair.
    My thoughts move like sluggard glacial mountains.
    I exist without existing,
    imprisoned in the cold;
    my heart wrapped deeply in ICE.

    TEARS...

    They run down my face,
    slowly eroding little ditches in my
    face.
    Last night I slept with sorrow.
    He wrapped me in his arms
    and blew more tears in my eyes as I slept.
    My desire to escape him ebbed lower as the night
    past.
    With saltiness and the
    dried parch feeling
    I emerge a desolate landscape
    painted by Dali.
    Priceless and with tears falling
    draining me of all color.
    They fall
    silently they crawl down my face;
    etching pathways of deep despair and my
    face resembles a ravaged valley;
    broken and without life.
    My skin is dry and pale
    and beneath the surface an
    underground storm system
    rages.
    Willpower
    becomes past tense and more
    tears to my eyes.
    The tears continue to drip
    leaving my face cold and dry.
    My Tears fall quickly and freeze.
    I have become ICE AND TEARS.

    ~Copyright
    The Year of the Monkey (2004)
    The 93rd year, 4th month, 28day
    "Lady Yang's Dragon" Publishing
    ~*PropheticNsyght
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being an artist, when you mentioned Dali…my excitement along with the brilliance of this piece leapt…

    Ice and Tears…

    Through this passage…you just kept pulling me in deeper, it reminded me of the poet Pablo Neruda’s style…the building and pulling deeper into the experience through the imagery and emotion….Your skills were just “Miraculous” on this particular piece… I know I keep writing novels to you…but when I read something I really like…I can’t help it….*sigh, shrugging shoulders* :look: let me just get this over with…lol

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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey ma,

    Know that i don't ever have any problem with you writing 'novels' on here. I admire and look forward to your notes with much joy!!! I love checking back just to see what you've written. I have become your biggest fan and I can tell you that as a black man, you continue to inspire me more and more. Thank you so much Angelic. God Bless you my darling. I appreciate your love and I would love to write with you. I know i've said this before but I will be getting with you real soon. If you'll have me that is. :lips:
    Thank you once again and God bless.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt this quite deeply, it was a wave that hit me with each ripple...
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know if you believe in poetic polygamy or not, but ifen you do, after Angelic, can you and I have a go at, seeing that you is a brotha and all. I was kind of nervous to ask, seeing that your lines are so very strong. I might faint in the midst of your writings. Loved this poem by the way. WoW is all I can say bout you today. Maybe I will come up with some better words on another day. Please forgive me.


    ~J ...waiting in line.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your majesty,
    All I can say is thank you *bowing*
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now look here Joyce. I've been wanting to write with you since I came on here. YOU know your the Bomb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I just didn't know how to approach you!!!! Can you believe that???????? Out of the frying pan and into the fire I belive the term is. I WOULD LOVE TO WRITE WITH YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! My email is [email protected] please hit me up with a topic/theme for the poem and we'll get to writing.
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You...I Am Honored. I would be so very honored if you would choose the subject/theme. I can and will write with you on any subject including a love duet. Whatever you want to do. Be thinking about it, because I will be emailing you soon. :sand:


    ~j
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was too tyte ya pen has leak a masterpeice
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you brotha Rich. You are much loved.