Black Poetry : I wonder

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Carameldlite, Oct 10, 2005.

  1. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    I wonder
    Do you know my pain
    Do you know my strife
    Can you see past my smile
    And into my life
    Do you see the ****
    That causes my fears
    Can you pinpoint what exactly
    Brings me to tears
    Do I make any sense
    Do you even care
    I'm at my breaking point
    I'm living in a nightmare
    I'm scared to feel cuz
    I don't want that rejection
    To look in the mirror
    And hate my reflection
    I love so much
    But I'm crippled by fear
    I just wanna be loved
    Without worries or tears
     
  2. choclatefantasy

    choclatefantasy Member MEMBER

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    that poem was hot! it captured how i feel most of the time! keep it up girl!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That need just to be loved, without the fear of being hurt, makes us so afraid to love. You described this pain so well poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt the depth of this piece ....flow on express
     
  5. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for all the feedback. I really appreciate it.
     
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    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice write
    Very nice
     
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    I wonder...how u were able to read my mind?...This is an great poem...


    Peace!
     
  8. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is such a nice drop into your mind poet. Very enjoyable indeed.
     
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