Black Poetry : I Wish It Was You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Wisdom7, Aug 20, 2005.

  1. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    6 a.m. and I rise
    The cold air is biting my skin
    D---mn, I wish it was you

    Gazing through the window panes
    The rain is pouring down
    I'm all wet, how did that happen

    Our memories flow through me
    Like a never ending record
    Srop! Stop! No....don't stop

    Like two strange ships
    Passing in the night
    Why did you come..and go

    12 am there I lay
    The warm air blankets my skin
    D---mn.......I wish it was you

    SO I COULD GET THAT $50 U OWE ME!!!! :hammer: (sike! last line just playing)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice vision of memories flowing
    through ya if only it was da one .
     
  3. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks RICH. I actually wrote it about 10 years ago, I just always like it.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i see why , it's grade A ......
     
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    This is very nice Wisdom. I like the vision it brings. Ummm....If it was me I would show up with that $50 plus interest.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words really bring the reader into your vision. So well written poet.
     
  7. Tha-Emissary

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    Nice Flow & Keep the last line its a trip! lol.
     
  8. Lloyd

    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's so hard when something special like love is over!!It ain't easy to move over.Sometimes i wonder about all the pain we bear,all that "where is she,what is she doing,does she think about me now?"!!!I'm sick,love make me sick...So i wanna say GET OFF to love.I can live without THIS type of love.Soulmate,pfff,STORIES!!!!
    Anyway nice shot man!
     
  9. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone. I wrote it 10 years ago and lost it, so I kind of had to recreate it from my mind. The first one was better. But thanks for seeing my vision :luvv:
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

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    u dont know how much im feelin this way...very nice poem...the last line was too funny,lol
     
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