Black Poetry : i will try

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by daroc, Mar 13, 2005.

  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a mutual understanding
    about wanting to know each other
    let inner souls become outer
    im having trouble
    opening doors to my heart
    to a man that seems to only want just that
    questioning his motive
    wondering if he will really have my back
    or just use my words
    for his own pleasure
    and games
    essentially no excuse
    can I hide behind
    trying to deny my feelings
    of fear of letting someone inside
    at times I found myself
    hoping for this
    a friendship
    that seems natural
    a conversation that feels natural
    disclosing information to someone
    I trust
    for a change
    but when its been so long
    since anyone cared
    that road seems so long
    the path so narrow
    to a goal of communication
    asserting myself through truths wisdom and guidance
    only to express my emotions
    that have been inside
    far to long
    it just seems so hard
    to open my windows to a weary sky
    that the weather man said will clean up
    but hasn’t yet
    I want so badly to unleash all my thoughts
    for him to soak in
    all I can do is say I will try
    even despite my obvious
    obstacles that my body
    seems to not want to overcome
    all I can say
    is ill try​
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said keep trying don't give up or in !
    tyte drop
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I particularly liked these lines:
    "it just seems so hard
    to open my windows to a weary sky
    that the weather man said will clean up
    but hasn’t yet"
    But really this entire piece was well written, it so expressed those feelings of uncertainty. Flow on poet.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a brave poem - I am lovin it. Feelin u
     
  5. angelicsage

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    It takes a bigger person to receive love
    than it does to give it...
    but both are hard roads
    "trying" is the first step
    open up...it's a gamble
    but you'll never win
    if you don't play
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    a rich piece
    ...keep trying.....keep on trying..