Black Poetry : I was tryin' to say

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by candeesweet, Nov 9, 2014.

  1. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just realax and take some
    weight off that back.
    Love who you've become
    For the facts to be surcome.
    No one can ever make
    you a better person.
    Only a few come so soon
    To see that bloom.
    Take being put down
    Nourished with a frown
    Free to breathe
    With no pressure put
    upon
    In order to see the final outcome
    Of it all being about to much weight is like
    being scared of missing
    that sudden ray
    stating their
    comes a period
    when all shall happen
    in a say.
     
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    KingSango Banned MEMBER

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    I was trying to say I liked your poem but ego arose. Instead of critiquing yours I began to compose. Yet not wanting to lose you nor not appreciate your service. I shall pay compliment because you deserve it. You are one of the lasts along with I. Black poets lingering on refusing to die. To surrender our gift is to melt away. And that's all I'm trying to say.
     
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    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All I'm gonna say is
    Your words are like:
    a dew set up on fallin leaves
    Purked up
    knowing
    Creations Will Continue
    to ensue.
     
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