Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Was (Ol' Gurl)

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  1. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am a Young Girl
    So....Should I cry?????
    Of Course I am a Young Lady
    But why...Why

    I used ta enjoy tha freestyle
    Gettin ma Rhyme ryte
    Gettin Ma style tyte
    Used be a bad girl

    Used to cuss like a mad girl


    Soooo....
    Now can the furture be chased by the past
    Could I bring new presentation
    From what was seen last????

    Boy oh Boy

    Call me a trip
    Because I was one of those
    Who'd take you all the way across
    in my own world

    I was not a girl

    OL Gurl was hmmmm
    dat phatty
    hmmmm dat platty
    So many young chicks

    Just like me

    I wish I wish
    It wont like me
    I could push it shove it
    Brush it all off

    But nahh
    I confront it
    I say like then
    S*** was raw

    What was I thinking
    I mean Nuthing at all
    I was THE image of hmmmm
    Love.....Lust

    and everything In between and After

    OL GurL was the Queen of Empty Laughter
    I am a Queen of A New Chaper
    One of Royalties many seek after
    But hmmmmm

    How can I be
    When I feel your Perception
    is altered of me
    How can it be

    Sometimes you look like a fool
    Like..."You actin all....."
    But Like I said I am Brand :new:
    And I mean The Grand Who

    I need the chance to Embrace that SHE
    Yall could not see OL Gurl was me
    I Be's that One 1 Now
    Above all that Shoot em up Pow pow

    Even all that Sexy Meow talk
    That talk that talk
    Walk That Walk
    Be a B888 at all time

    Get that N8888
    Ooh he fine
    Through I got tired
    Even Sobered Up

    Like HA HA HAHA HA
    My High is New Height
    Am I Higher than You now?
    Do not take Offense

    I was a fool before
    I was Just you before
    Copy-cattin the Copy-Catt
    I am Exclusive

    Wasn't I always?
    If I would have realized
    Maybe I would Have Made the Change sooner
    Maybe a Late Bloomer

    But I realize Im Fine
    I am Finer than a Mutha
    I am Bangin Like no otha
    Tell me how Cool I am

    Cool is the Operative
    Cool to the Touch
    Not Hot
    Or Hittin the Hot spot

    Soon I will change my name again
    This is just where it begins
    Please embrace me with in
    I am my own revolution via evolution

    Feels good A Soul Alive

    No More No More No More Lies

    Freeing from the under mind

    Now you can Look into my Eyes

    She almost ruined me

    But Rescue mission active

    I greet you Hello....Blessings......Hi"

    Please wave to her

    As OL' GURL says good:bye:
     
  2. Bluewater

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    Hi PLATINUMILLITY1
    I love this poem
    It reminds me of growing pains, that
    transition of a new pattern a new way of stepping.
    And it's very cool. Keep inking sis.
    We all really enjoy how you flow

    Peace~N~Love
     
  3. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :love: Blessings to you Blue Water....
    Thank you so Much
    I am very Appreciative of you words
    Thank You
     
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    I enjoyed the read, I also enjoyed the re-newal of self, as you are wise beyond your years.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep sight this was tyte love the flow ...wow
     
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    May you continue to learn and grow from your experiences. Keep that forward progression going, sis!
     
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    I enjoyed reading this. The reflection of ones life realizing her mistakes and then the re-newal of oneself. Great poem.
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :10300: ............:em2400:
    Blessings Family.....
    I am Blessed to have found what i have so far...
    and yes I am Still on the GO!!!
    It is important to me.....and I appreciate your love of that!!!

    Queentswana-Lady I am Working on it!...lol :smooch:

    $$RICH$$- I am really willing to see as far as mine eyes will bring me :smooch:

    Watzinaname-I am really trying to....even trying to learn from not making any....(now howz about that.....):smooch:

    FattnBeautiful- Sister I am So joyfl that you have come into my world....just to be apart of something I share....Please Don't be a stranger :smooch:

    Thank you and Blessings Fam.!
     
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    uppin this back..........
     
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