Black Poetry : I WANTED TO...

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  1. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I WANTED TO…..WRITE A GOOD POEM
    LIKE THE ONES THAT FLOW THROUGH MY MIND
    WHEN I’M TIRED AND IT’S LATE
    AND WHEN ONCE I’VE GOTTEN UP
    THAT POEM DID DISINTEGRATE
    I MEAN….I WANTED TO WRITE ONE OF THOSE POEMS
    THAT I SCRIBBLE ON A NAPKIN
    BECAUSE I FELT IT IN MY SOUL AND RIGHT THERE
    IT HAD TO HAPPEN
    A LOVE POEM, ABOUT ECSTASY, SPIRITUALITY
    HOW TWO ARE LINKED BY GOD OR
    A STRUGGLE POEM ABOUT SURVIVING THE PROJECTS
    AND SLEEPLESS NIGHTS IN THE DARK
    MAYBE SOMETHING ABOUT
    NICKEL BAGS, DIME BAGS, MAYBE FOUR THE DUB
    OR A POEM ABOUT GRADUATING FROM SEX AND INFATUATION
    TO BECOMING A WOMAN KNOWLEDGEABLE OF GOD’S LOVE
    YOU SEE, I WANTED TO WRITE A DRIFT AWAY POEM
    ABOUT BLOWING OFF THE DAY AND CHARTERING A BOAT TO THE KEYS
    A GRATEFUL POEM THAT COMES WITH THE OVER STANDING
    THAT JAH PROVIDES ALL OF MY NEEDS
    OR A FLY AWAY POEM
    BABY LETS JUST FLY AWAY FROM HERE
    MOVING TOWARDS A CERTAIN DESTINY
    WITHOUT CERTAIN FEAR
    I REALLY WANTED TO RIGHT A GOOD POEM
    LIKE A DON’T BEAT ME POEM OR A
    DON’T LET HIM BEAT YOU POEM
    BECAUSE YOU ARE A EMPRESS
    AND QUEEN BY DESIGN
    AND ANY TREATMENT LESS THAN ROYALTY IN ITSELF IS A CRIME
    OR A MOMMIES ON CRACK POEM
    BUT I LOVE HER STILL
    THOUGH I SIT IN PRISON BECAUSE I SHOT HER BOYFRIEND FOR HITTING HER
    HIM I ALMOST DID KILL
    SHE, LOVES HIM …..STILL
    AN I’M BROKEN POEM, BECAUSE MY LIFE IS A STORM
    BECAUSE I GET NO BREAKS
    YOU SEE…I’M THINKING ABOUT JUST LEAVING THIS PLACE
    BECAUSE MY HEART SO ACHES
    I REALLY WANTED TO WRITE A GOOD POEM
    ABOUT BLACK MEN, AND HOW I LOVE THEM SO
    HOW THEIR ESSENCE AND GRACE IS JUST ONE STEP BELOW JAH
    THIS I WANT, NO NEED, EVERY ONE OF THEM TO KNOW
    OR MAYBE A BLACK MAMMA POEM
    THOUGH HER MONEY WAS TIGHT
    HOT GRITS, A WARM BED, AND A STRONG TREE LIMB
    ENSURED WE’D BE BROUGHT UP RIGHT
    I WANTED…TO WRITE A GOOD POEM
    BUT LIKE A TORNADO, SO MANY CIRCLED MY HEART
    AND WHEN I PICKED UP MY PAPER AND PEN
    I SIMPLY KNEW NOT WHERE TO START
    AS IT SEEMS THE TORNADO WITHIN ME CONTINUES
    AS IT SEEMS THE DILEMMA ENSUES
    I WANTED TO WRITE A GOOD POEM
    BELIEVE ME, I REALLY WANTED TO
    Lataisha Nicole
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So much joy and pain and everything else in between was inside your brain. And so you encompassed all of that into one poem, one GOOD poem that is. ^5 poetess, for letting those thoughts flow oh so well!
     
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    :bowdown:

    Lataisha, you made me wanna stand up on my feet and shout!

    Sistah, you did not "write a GOOD poem." No, no, no! You wrote a MASTERPIECE!
     
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    Can I say amen to what sista cherry said. You sought to be good but this was greatness. :welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome you have indeed scribe a flow of perfect form dats 110% of greatness
    loved this one
     
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    it's funny how you wanted to

    and YOU DID IT

    this is a great poem so if you wanted to write one you did

    is show the pain of what is out there and we need to pay attention

    i have this saying if somebody (especially Black People) are suffering

    then i'm suffering because they are me

    trust me i don't see anything broken here, i understand the heartaches

    are a way to measure the joy YOU will feel.....................eventually

    keep pushing poet

    brilliant work here
     
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    I write this Thanks with a heart filled of gratitude. It's nice to be a part of a circle that finally gets it! I am filled with this enormous amount of love inside of me and not even my children understands how I will bring a stranger into my home and feed him or give gas money to them. I feel that I could die from much things worse than LOVE. I love the poets in this community as I love myself, and I appreciate the love that YOU ALL give in return. Thanks again!
     
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    just wanted to add my two cents to what everyone else has said...

    awesome.

    the river floweth.
     
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    Hello Lataisha...

    Good just doesn’t do this peace justice, magnificent comes closer.
    Your poetry has a humbleness about it that I felt from the first piece
    I read and its admiring. I truly enjoyed taking this in. Thank you.:)

    Feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    No, Thank you. Your responses are all so sweet, I thank you for feeling me. It makes me know that I'm not crazy, and more so, that I am not alone.

    Bless!
     
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