Black Poetry : I Wanted To...

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I sit here on this Friday
    Watching Def Poetry
    Waiting for Mos Def to come out and welcome me
    I listen to a family
    Of poets whose words warp
    My mind and flow through me.
    I was doing some soul searching
    For inspiration you see.
    I wanted to write a poem about society.
    I wanted to write a poem about black men under captivity.
    I wanted to write about stupid **** like evolution
    And tell you how revolution
    Came froom people abusing
    The love that we were using.
    I wanted to write
    About the highlights
    Of being Nikki Giovanni or Talib Kweli.
    I wanted to write about being free.
    I wanted to talk about listening to artists like Floetry
    While blowing trees
    In a summer night's breeze.
    You see
    My goal was to share my ecstatic-y
    about being able to speak of my nativity.
    My goal was to turn my opinion into creativity.
    My goal was to let my voice ring
    Off da walls of humanity.
    I wanted to let all of da
    'isms' of America fall upon me.
    I changed my station
    To a channel of free-flowing necessity.
    I sipped hot tea and tried to let a cool melody
    Come out of me.
    I tried to let my nerves scream
    Until my brain and intestines leaked
    Out da juices of creativity
    I wanted it to seep
    Out of my fingers and eyes
    Until there was no more contained in me.
    I wanted to write a poem you see....
    But all I came up with
    Was this.
    :)

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  2. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    S.ugah H.oney I.ced T.ea !!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    :eek: (mouth drops to the floor)now this is tyte, our race should speak out more.
    way to flow!
    dat was hot!!!!:hot: :hot: :hot: :hot:
     
  3. Khasm13

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    this is tyte as hell...
    what you came up with was
    some true creativity...
    which is a beautiful thing
    in its pure essence...
    peace
    khasm
     
  4. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    story......girl that was a way to put it!!! thanks for da love!!!
    Keep checkin me to see if i'll be droppin some S.ugah H.oney I.ced T.ea again!!

    khasm......i'm glad you understood the underlying message. you know your :heart: is always appreciated :wink:

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, Playwitit...you're struttin ya skills on this one...really like the part about - Letting a cool melody come out of you...This was quite smooth!
     
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    o, my yesssssssssssss!
    play wit it and do ya thang
    dis was awesomely tyteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!
    got me ova here jumping from this heat u pose
    lovin' it
     
  7. Clio_the_Muze

    Clio_the_Muze Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ya flow is like whoa! *lol* I'm diggin' this, sounds nice, flows right. It has a good sound to it. Thanks for sharing....
     
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    Hey PlayWitIt you are pouring with your flowing..i am feeling you...this is really great poet :)
    Peace
     
  9. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angelicsage........boo you know i'm tryna come up wit my skillz....tryna learn the art of da quill.... :)

    My $$RICH$$ness..........i'm glad, as always, that u're feelin me!!!

    Clio_the_Muze........ya :hot: burnin up ma!!! You know that u're opinion is always valued!!!

    Bluewater.....a very talented poet you are. glad to feel your love.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    I like your flow play.....tru to tha bone :)
     
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