Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Want You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by kente417mojo, Feb 23, 2005.

  1. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want you
    like I want freedom
    in the pit of my stomach
    I want you
    and I envy those
    fortunate enough to have had you
    wrapped in their arms
    at the same time
    I curse them out of jealousy
    one of the many flaws in me, is impatience
    your beautiful brown skin
    your thin waist and coke bottle shape
    makes me grin
    with impure thoughts
    and daydreams
    born from my stolen heart
    I didn't say I was a saint
    anything but
    though, I will say you can have my heart
    long as you handle with care
    and as long as you share
    what's in yours
    it's funny how I don't believe in love
    until it's right there
    until it reminds me of it's existence
    through you
    and it's funny the way I'm
    so out of touch with myself
    that I don't feel I'm me
    until I'm touched by someone else
    makes me wonder if
    I'm the one that doesn't exist
    yet I want you more than
    I want perfection
    I want you more than
    I want the sun to rise and wake me
    from my blissful sleep
    I want you more than
    I want to be deep
    I guess because wanting you
    is really wanting to be complete
    and that in essence
    is what I long to be
     
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    Simply lovely...

    Mmmph... this flow is so sweet...
    Thank you for sharing this. It really
    took me there with it's heartfelt
    yearning filled hopefulness and honesty

    Much
    Peace & Love Cutie
    Akilah :luv:
     
  3. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks you Akilah. This poem is about you pretty girl.:kiss1:

    I appreciate you comment really. Thank you very much.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    his was so divine and fuzzy had a beautiful tone
    keep expressing from heart ............................
     
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    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks $$RICH$$. Much appreciated man.
    :D
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's lines like these:
    "and it's funny the way I'm
    so out of touch with myself
    that I don't feel I'm me
    until I'm touched by someone else"
    that made me pause while reading and just say, wow. This read so warm and genuinely brotha, flow on.
     
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    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Watz, I'm glad you like that line because it's my favorite line in this piece too. It describes me to a T. It is from the heart and I'm glad you appreciate it. Thanks for the comment. ;) :wine:
     
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    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whewwwwwwww....I am in love with this piece..... Check out my poem FOOD FOR THOUGHT,,,,I know what you feel by wanting something so bad...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tru indeed brutha keep flowing
     
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    "it's funny how I don't believe in love
    until it's right there
    until it reminds me of it's existence
    through you"


    I felt those lines

    But the whole poem was intriguing, had to keep readin, just moved along the flow.


    great write poet :dance: