Black Poetry : I want you to know

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Carameldlite, Nov 9, 2005.

  1. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    FYI: I wrote this poem on a McDonald's napkin

    To think of a life without you
    Is to think of my demise
    Yet when you ask me simple questions
    What comes out of my mouth is lies
    I want you to know I love you
    Thats one thing that is certainly true
    And if you should ever leave me
    I don't know what I'd do
    You are the reason my heart beats
    You are my thought every morning I wake
    And when I woke up this morning
    All I thought was last night was a mistake
    I love you with all my heart
    And I wanna be better for you
    But I need your love to guide me
    So that we can make it through
    Tears are flowing as I write this
    So this napkin is getting wet
    Soon it will be useless
    Like my life without you in it
    I've made a lot of mistakes
    But this I don't want to be one
    I want you to love me forever
    And for me to be a mother to your son
    I can't think of enough ways to thank you
    For what you've been to me
    For those times I cried on your shoulder
    To those times spent in ecstasy
    I want you to know I need you
    Like a flower needs water and sun
    And if I lose you baby I want you to know
    My life will surely be done
    I don't know what you're thinking
    But God I wish I did
    I am worried from this mess I created
    And I'm looking back asking myself "what if?"
    I want you to know I love you
    Thats something that is true
    And I'm pleading now that you would stay
    And I can be the one you hold onto
    Baby I can promise that I will
    Try my hardest to keep myself in line
    And baby I don't wanna hurt you
    I want to be with you forever and all time
    Say that you'll never leave me
    If I gotta beg that's what I'll do
    Just say the word and I'm on my knees
    Whatever it takes to keep you
    This is my desperate plea
    To keep you in my life
    I want to grow old with you
    So we could be husband and wife
    I know you think I'm full of it
    And I'm out to break your heart
    But that was never my intention
    Cuz I loved you from the start
    I know I messed up too many times
    Yes I know its true
    But I hope and pray you will look past
    My mess and let me stay with you
     
  2. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW...that napkin neva knew it was gon end up on destee.com huh :)

    you know love takes all our emotions and intensifies them

    everything becomes a state of extremity

    Be patient...if this love is meant to be it will

    If they read this...then they will be sure as I am about your love.

    peace poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We all make mistakes, some we learn from and have to move on, others we are given a chance to work on so they don't happen again. Very heartfelt piece poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep emotions flowing from the Napkin
    we learn to weave and move beyond ...tyte drop
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Carameldlite
    It is amazing how the deepest of thought
    Comes in the oddest of places
    I like how you share your feeling
    Expressing that "I'm not sure feeling"
    and that is the most deepest vibe that comes
    when you feel love
    Much love poet
    Keep the poetry coming !!!!

    Peace
     
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    Victoria87 Active Member MEMBER

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    Very nice poem, although the beat was off at times. Other than that it was really good.
     
  7. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks

    yeah, it was kinda off beat but i was just writing whatever was on my heart instead of thinking about the structure of the poem. Thanks for all the feedback.
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Napkin or not this was hott poet
    Nice deep peice poet
    Man where is my napkin I think I will cry??
    Naaaawwwwwwww
    Flow on poet
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Forget notebooks
    i need to buy napkins to drop a
    hot one like that.
    Flow on poet
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You spilled this one, and very nicely I might add.
    thanks for spilling it on us, love the flow