Quiet Poetry Lounge : I want to go first

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by kente417mojo, Dec 3, 2004.

  1. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Staring...glaring at you
    wondering what the day would bring
    if you weren't here
    if you ceased to exist
    I'd try to follow you there
    the thought makes me realize
    that I want to go first
    can't bear the thought
    of trying to get along
    without your support
    without your love
    dragging my feet through life
    cause without you here
    it's no longer worth the effort
    or the fight
    yes...I want to go first
    I guess it's sort of selfish
    to leave you
    instead of being left
    to deal with the void
    and emptiness
    but death I can swallow
    as long as it's mine...not yours
    no laughter
    no warmth
    just silence and darkness
    yes, I think I'd rather go
    than stay on this Earth
    cursing the days first breathe
    and praying for eternal night
    that's no way to live my life
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this here is a treasure poem
    i always felt this way and surely wanted to be first so now i face the days alone
    because i didn't go first ........this one went so deep it was cutting
     
  3. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks $$RICH$$. I've always thought that it would be a really hard thing to deal with. Sorry that you had to deal with this kind of situation because I know it's probably very tough. I still feel that way now. Thanks for the comment man.
     
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    I think that way when I think of all my loved ones...
    that's a deep poem Kente, thanks for sharing.
     
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    This is heavy and beautiful, my brothah.
     
  6. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Carrie and Gempis. I appreciate it. It's obvioulsy a hard thing to go through. I feel for anyone that has lost a loved one because it's a hard thing to get over. :flowers:
     
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    This flowed so genuinely, so emotively felt. The reality of having to live without a loved one is a bitter pill to swallow for sure.
     
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    i like how you laid this very strong and beautiful poem to me....very well written....Angel
     
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    Hey... get out of my head

    This peice laid out those anxious thoughts
    we all find so very painful :crying: to contemplate... beautifully

    Thanks for sharing Brutha Kente

    Much...
    Peace & Love
    Akilah :read:
     
  10. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Akilah, Watz and mzblkangel, thank you for you comments. :kiss1: You guys are always so positive and I appreciate it. Much love to everyone here.