Black Poetry : "i want a brutha who can appreciate my mind"

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Sistah

    Don’t ask me to appreciate
    The cleft of your
    Cerebral cortex
    Without evidence of its existence
    Insisting I respect it

    Show me your mental depth
    And I’ll (un)dress and caress your
    Medulla Oblongata
    in appreciation of
    left and right mind
    as I explore the depths
    of you

    Does, “I’m trying to get mine”
    Translate to
    “I ain’t got time (for a brutha like you)"
    Oh!
    Is it a crime
    For a brutha to admire your
    38 inch solid B-Hind
    Or, the sleekness of your
    23 inch thin waistline
    You’ve worked so hard to define

    {work with me, now}

    Is it wrong for a brutha to say
    YOU'RE BEAUTIFUL
    Even though you’re pushing a doctor’s weight
    Which opened closed doors…got you through the gate

    {****, your body is tight!}

    That’s right…that’s right.
    You may not like how I say what I say
    But you can’t deny its TRUTH

    “But…what about my mind?”

    Your mind is the last thing I see
    So, don’t knock me
    For appreciating the rest of you
    Enough to get to the mental depth
    Of you

    Is it a crime?
     
  2. Sista Steele

    Sista Steele Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovin the honesty in this one. Yes, men are visual...not a crime, only a matter of understanding on our part.

    Nice work.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    work dat **** bruh man !!!
    drop da deep depth of flow to da lines
    work it in da define state of mind
     
  4. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Absolutely Intriguing!

    I like the way you took both points of view and laid it out for all of us to analyze, it so true....and if you didn't look with your eyes, you would probably never get to the mental...

    Blessings on Ya House!:D
     
  5. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was really nice! It was so honest it made me laugh.
     
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    UL820 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    scribe,my brotha,scribe .
     
  7. Jyntlbreez

    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOL, as always you bring it true...nice piece!
     
  8. red_bone

    red_bone New Member MEMBER

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    Poeting is the thing and you got that jizim so maintain it bratha!
     
  9. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    "Without evidence of its existence"

    ... uuhhhh ... skuze me ... you don't see all that evidence lay'n on da table ??? ... :lol:

    Thanks for the smile ... the laugh out loud ...
    the pleasure of your company one more again :kiss:

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  10. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and when you pass through

    you brangs it........... love the way you flowed. Can somebody in here say Klassik




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