Black Poetry : I used to be...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Jan 18, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I used to be...
    the one she called in the morning
    her dream at night
    her motivation to keep trying
    the hole she fell deep into

    I used to be...
    her tissue when she cries
    her blanket from the cold
    the adventure to her life
    her conversation when she needed to release

    I used to be...
    the sun to the dark
    the stars to her sky
    the lotion to her rough life
    her love, friend, and enemy

    Now Im the...
    grief to every morning
    the pain at night
    her excuse to give up
    the ditch she cant get out of

    Now Im the...
    force that forms tears
    the breeze that gives her goose bumps
    the predictable schedule
    the deaf person that never hears a thing

    Now Im the...
    shadow to her light
    the dark clouds to her july
    the sandpaper to her life
    her...., her um... her...??

    I just dont know how to love you anymore...
    I wish you knew how to show me.
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA. I can feel the hurt all the way over here. This pain is so very beautifully expressed, girl. I am sendin you :heart:
     
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    I used to be

    " Her motivation to keep trying
    the hole she fell deep into "

    Very Nice. This flow is tight. Its a five star piece.

    :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar:

    Connected in a personal way.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felt the emotions here, how one can be one's dream, and then change into one's....nightmare.
     
  5. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful, deep and moving
     
  6. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i am so feeling you on this...when how someone else see's you changes for the worse, and you don't know how to get back into their good graces...it's a hurting thing. much love to you for this.
     
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    very deep and emotional flow
    hold ya head up
    for your turn will come
    and nothin of this will be
    for it will
    be your past a faded memory of the pain...
    flow on nice drop :angel1:
     
  8. ~Provakativ~

    ~Provakativ~ Active Member MEMBER

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    Yup

    All I can say is dayum because I been here..... :teach: preach on
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very very tyte:)
     
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