Black Poetry : I try

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Monetary, Aug 30, 2003.

  1. Monetary

    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I care about why you cry
    But me, you would never try

    I stopped your way and you said bye
    This happened on the first try

    I wanted to lend you an ear and even my heart
    But, with you, I couldn't get pass the point of start

    A friend I tried to be
    But, your eyes saw pass me

    Nevertheless, I'd still kiss away your bitter and warm tears
    I'd give you comfort and take away your fears

    There, by your side, I would stay like a stone
    Never again will you ever be alone
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    brutha dis was so felt
    and the compromise of
    always their make a heart
    beat of warmth
    love how u pose'd dis piece
     
  3. Monetary

    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Rich.

    Thanks, bruh.

    I know you'd feel it.

    Dapz.
     
  4. suddenpassion

    suddenpassion Banned MEMBER

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    wow, where could he be now...wondering how many times I let him pass me by?? nice flow
     
  5. true love

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    LORD, where do I find a man like this? It's like true unconditional love. I had to read it again to make sure I was reading it right.
    Keep it flowing, plllleeeaaassee.
     
  6. angelicsage

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    This reached deep within the heart Monetary......
    A man who feels with a heart such as yours.......is to be valued

    I value the craftsmanship of beauty and vision of empathic love
    I've experienced in this piece!

    Nicely presented!
     
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    this was nice
     
  8. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's hard to extend unconditional love especially when that love isn't exteneded back to you. That was beautiful.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Money, doesn't post too often, so I looked for something of his I hadn't read before. This was a sweet scribe about love unconditionally felt.
     
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    very sweet money
    much love
    very touch by your flow
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart: