Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Tried...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Absolut, Nov 1, 2004.

  1. Absolut

    Absolut Active Member MEMBER

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    I Tried
    by Absolut

    I've seen these tears before
    falling backwards from a time & place of pain
    in a pool of thought where we began
    I saw back then
    a future of joy..
    not but a few suns from this day
    where you took me with your resilience of having your way

    I tried..

    but was denied full entry here
    between these walls
    where the memory paints the sky I could see you & I
    as we moved in sync..
    like the wind about the clouds
    you wisked my mind until my time was spent in the constant push

    I tried..

    to vent this like how it rains so hard from inside of me
    in these days of change some things stay the same
    and now how you've pictured me
    still I am
    between these frames
    so torn..
    how I feel you from tearing me
    in thoughts
    these parts bleed no longer pieces of my heart
    impulsive I rushed from the start to the end
    where I thought we'd be as together penned forever
    could you see our broken circle mend ?
    everything beyond this X-mas past
    could you do this math with me
    where in 5 days our eve became the day you left alone
    me..
    praying in this new year for you

    I just...
    with everything as such...
    *sighs*
    Tried..

    as it withered like everything I touch
    that dies you know the reaches of my pride I couldn't just
    apologize
    and now I'm only big enough
    so grown that now I'm only giving up
    Tomorrow for eternal highs
    yesterdays for goodbyes
    I wonder if..
    these days bring true a wish..
    will you ever miss
    me..
    other than this
    the long we'll never kiss
    like a father to this bastard "Love" sometimes I feel it doesn't exist
    Or maybe I wanna pretend it never did..
    myself
    and so convinced
    in my eternal reflection I became a hollow man
    my feelings disappeared
    only now can I see this backwards reality turn around
    but I don't know where to go from here..
    I...I don't know
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    trying is all we can do sometime
    i was feeling u here and i tried to
    enter but the walls seem harder
    this here speaks out in tears and
    tell a story within it self ....wow !
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    trying is all we can do anyone can do

    feeling your flow...
     
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    You will never have to wonder because you had the courage to try. This piece is off tha hook.
     
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    hindsight maybe 20/20 but it doesn't hurt any less...

    Poet this was an immaculate creation...
    you are poet that knows the key to
    writing the soul free...

    Flame on...
    Sage
     
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    Absolut Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks all..I'm just tryin to fit in with all of u great poets here...

    Its been a long year & a half a lot has happened and I've got a lot to share...

    Prolly some more recent stuff in the next few days...right now I can't keep the pen down lol....thanks everyone

    ~vodka
     
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