Black Poetry : I tried!

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  1. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I tried...
    I tried to keep you happy.
    I tried to give you strength.
    I tried to be your lover .
    I tried to be your friend.
    I tried to understand you.
    I tried to always forgive.
    I tried to be a compassionate
    partner.
    I tried to the bitter end.

    I tried to mother your outside kids.
    I tried to make a home for you and
    them.
    I tried to stretch those dollars, even
    when the budget was slim.
    I tried to embrace your culture.
    I tried to be your support.
    I tried to give you comfort.
    I tried to give you love.

    I tried to be your fantasy, your
    future and your past.
    I tried to be there for you up
    to the very last.
    I tried to be the best for you.
    I tried to be the best for me.
    I tried to be consistent.
    I tried to be sincere.

    I tried but you kept pushing away.
    I tried to comfort you when our love went away.
    I tried to get you to see you could
    stay.
    I tried to show you change.
    I tried to show you that you were
    all that I would ever need.
    I tried until my heart did bleed.
    I tried even though I saw your
    greed...and even when it got
    so tough...
    I TRIED BUT IT WASN'T ENOUGH!

    BJS(c)2003
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow! deep here
    sometime we try so hard and it's not enough
    and sometime we try and try but one can't see the light
    i feel this so much coz i know when i try hard
    and i am a witness to trying and it's never enough
    thankz for bringing this to light
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey msluciousb
    i know just what you mean
    trying hard all the time
    good points
    nice flow
    Peace
     
  4. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This....this was so on the hot spot.............
     
  5. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for reading and relating to this piece.

    I know you ladies know and Rich thanks for responding like you always do. Sometimes we have to know when it's time to let go and let GOD! Now I know...

    BLESSINGS ON YOUR HOUSE!
     
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    Gurl...now you know...and you can go on and find someone worth your love :)
     
  7. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    D*MN... I FEEL THIS, NICE FLOW...
     
  8. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for reading and relating...

    Yeah, love is an arduious achievement that is often undestated in it's importance to us all. Finding love is not always at issue as it is in sustaining the love! Any thoughts holla back???

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    I tried but you kept pushing away.
    I tried to comfort you when our love went away.
    I tried to get you to see you could
    stay.

    - msluciousb


    A good effort my sister!
     
  10. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes it was onepoet, I am a give all or nothing...

    type of girl, it's all or nothing all the time, which might explain why I am feeling rather tired right now, tired of the singles game and all the trickery and then the struggles of relationships just want to get on even ground for a while...
    :)

    Thanks for reading!
    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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