Black Poetry : I TRIED TO LOVE YOU

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  1. drdetroit

    drdetroit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I tried to love you
    but you wouldnt let me in
    you wouldnt let me close
    you pushed away again

    I tried to hold you
    both strong and tenderly
    to take away the pain
    but you just wouldnt see

    I tried to show you
    that love was still right here
    right within your touch
    but you are full of fear

    I tried to enter
    but was met with much disgrace
    you bolted all the locks
    and slammed it in my face

    You've heard this before
    and even once again
    but you will not listen
    theirin lies the sin

    I tried to love you
    no words or deeds would sway
    the lead around your heart
    and you must have your way

    I tried to love you
    but I couldnt sway
    It's all about you
    so now I'll go away
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One can try to love, and hang on for as long as one can. But you can't keep trying for an eternity, if they don't see the light eventually one has to move on. Well written piece poet.
     
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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome poet in direct from above wit love

    tyte drop , when we try to love sometime we have to
    feel out the do's and don't of a heart .....well done look
    to read more of you , happy u here to share upon the
    house welcome to the family !
     
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    Welcome to Destee Drdetroit

    Very nice flow. When the heart shuts and the sound of that closure blinds the eyes of the one that colsed it. It is very hard to get in if your seen as the one that created the pain. Space sometimes gives way for them to ask you back in for an explaination or to be a part of their life again. But in love there are no guarantees.
     
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    i relate to this so much...
     
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    I like this one it puts forth this emotion that not many can relate to. Keep it real cause that's what you feel.
     
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    Prince Yakeem Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was the story of my life...yeah great work I could really feel that.
     
  8. drdetroit

    drdetroit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx for the compliment
     
  9. one_love

    one_love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A lot of times some people realize their feelings when it is to late, but they are not the one or fate will guide you back.
    Nice scribe

    One_Love
     
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    welcome to destee.com

    very tight drop i likes this vibe mos def
    thanks for sharing....Peace
    Angel
     
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