Black Poetry : I tried the sun

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  1. prophet2

    prophet2 Active Member MEMBER

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    I tried the sun today
    this is the day the sun would shine
    if it were not for the trees that were blocking me
    telling me just a few more days before the storm would come
    the storm that would haunt me
    with thoughts of you'


    I tried the sun today
    this the day that the sun would shine
    I tried thinking of the last ice cream sandwich
    I bought from the truck
    would it melt if I could not get to the house in time
    before the sprinkles would come from the sky
    why did you have to die and only
    leave me of thoughts of a chocalate eclair
    from the good humor truck

    I tried the sun today
    the sun that would never shine
    I thought about the shaved ice
    in the black itatlian neighbor hood
    where I experience my first new name "******"
    I thought I would play out in the free sun
    while you worked on your vision
    but it seems your only lived with the thoughts
    of another generation lost without thinking

    I tried the sun today
    the sun that would never shine
    the sun that would never shine
    the sun that would never shine
    the sun that would never shine

    I hope the sun never shines

    Miss Annie loved the rain
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Exquisite!!!

    1poetsought ~
     
  3. Khasm13

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    this piece is tyte...keep it coming...
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    love da flow keep dropping vibes like dis
     
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    ahhhhh! so sad.
     
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    ASHANTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Sun and the Moon the eyes of God, in the day it shines and the night it glows, when the rain it cries and the night he sleeps.
    The son of the son is the light to Gods house. I love your work I had to add these words your concepts are excellent the son that never sleeps.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Peace to your heart. Rainy days suck....beautiful piece
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    unique and beautiful!
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    miss annie loved the rain....u got me...i loved this
     
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