Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Told Him

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  1. Tatiana

    Tatiana Member MEMBER

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    I TOLD HIM...

    As my body hits the bed
    I heard the pillow's request for my head
    with a soft mellow voice it said
    'it's time for rest my Blessed'
    sleep crept into my body
    like a solid grip taking hold of me
    forcing my eyes not to see
    the forbidden journey
    into a dream created for me
    as I got high on sleep
    my body and soul plunged deep
    that's when I heard the beep
    of his watch, as his fingers traced my face
    triggering my heart to beat at a fast pace

    He whispered - 'you have a smile no man can erase
    and you were surely worth the chase'

    I told him - ' I miss those days,
    the ones no man can replace'

    I told him - 'I miss your strong embrace
    the ones that made my river race'

    I told him - 'I miss the depth of our intimate positions
    that caused me to surrender to multiple orgasms'

    I told him - 'I miss your fingers roaming through my hair
    and that fervid, tempting stare'

    I told him - 'my love is so strong,
    my Love, nothing you did was ever wrong

    I told him - 'I am sorry for any stress,
    my King, you always deserved the best'

    I told him - 'I cried an ocean when you relinquished
    my heart and soul was anguished'

    I told him - 'God made me for you,
    whatever you ask of me, I will do'

    I told him - 'I prayed for you everyday,
    wishing and hoping you will stay......'
    before I said, what I wanted to say
    he gently wiped my tears away
    and with that tempting, fervid stare,
    he softly caressed my curly hair
    and as our feelings of lechery grew deep
    the watch on his hand began to beep
    and in astonishment I arise from my sleep
    in shock, deranged, I began to weep
    crying for him to appear,
    begging God to be fair
    I want to touch him, one more time
    I want to tell him, he will always be mine
    a calm, cold wind entered my bed
    and softly brushed against my head
    I felt his presence and then I said....

    I told him - 'baby, I will always love you, even though you are dead'


    Tatiana (new and proud to be here)
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent Poem Tatiana.

    I am glad we joined this place!!
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh, wow...
    this was so emotionally torrential
    this piece cried of the purest form
    of love...

    Excellent Read Tatiana!
     
  4. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi there :wave:
    Welcome to the both of you...for you are about to explore a home like no other.
    And I must say, you came in, getting my attention. This was an awesome piece and I felt every word that was written, ...looking forward for more.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...What we can still feel for someone, even thugh they have left this earth, this was so touching, that last line just hit me with a jolt. Keep writing, I'll certainly keep reading.
     
  6. Tatiana

    Tatiana Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU

    :wave: Thanks for the warm welcome and feed back.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome scribing loving da style
    welcome and happy to have u upon the family
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jumping: Wow. Welcome sister. That was, I can't even describe it. :grouphug:


     
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