Quiet Poetry Lounge : i thought lost my soul*

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  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *that's how i felt when i left she*


    the world is my unborn child speaking truth--
    and my nose feels cut--
    spiting my face--

    peculiar--
    something has arisen in I
    been there but--
    wants now to be charted--
    claimed and accounted for--
    that something is--
    the
    unDYING
    need
    ...........for
    ...............you.

    i left your sight and--
    my soul ran back and hugged you--

    a 'near love experience' i guess*

    i need you like unsaid truths--
    like circles need curves--
    like sugar stays sweet--
    like deserts have sand--

    like loving you is
    imminent--

    i thought i lost my soul when i walked away from you--
    but i lost my will
    to be without the presence of you--
    i lost--
    my sense of direction--
    because

    *all signs point to you*

    i feel snatched--
    and i could care less--
    you should
    keep my soul
    thus
    leaving me to seek you out
    therefore
    completing I*

    i lost my mind--
    it's with you--
    and i thought i just lost my soul.



    ****
    sean.
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feeling the vibes here nice drop....
    sometimes it just be like that
    Peace Angel
     
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    This is an incredible love that you felt. Reminded me of my own memories. Great one, Poet.
     
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    Hey poet ...

    this is nice.....


    beautifull...


    Last monday i was looking at this r&b music ours where they play only that tipe of music..and i saw this video of jagged edge walked right out of heaven...

    i thought it was a great song ....good beat it makes a man step in to his car
    and turn that song up and drive to the woman he loves and left ....

    You kinda put it down here in youre poem...




    Nice write...
    keep on keep on..






    LoveLibertylady:heart:
     
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    Feeling lost without the one who made you feel whole. Feeling the vibe here, I hear ya.
     
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    tyte drop felt it within too
     
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    "I thought i lost my soul when I walked out on You"

    that's what you said...
    "when I walked out on you"
    and then you said
    "but I lost my mind"

    nice piece...nice...cause you be answering all your questions
    you be showing that you can make it
    that you be heavy laden but "it is well with your soul"
    yu be lifting yourself upward...whether consciously or not
    In the creativity of this piece
    your minds intact too...

    Hear yourself...Hear yourself
    I Do...

    nice...very nice
     
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