Black Poetry : I Surrender...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    its cold here in this dark, metallic room
    with a bed and chairs and a tv in maroon
    i'm lonely, so lonely, and everybody has gone
    because the doctors say i'm doing better and that i'm strong
    so my family went home for the night, to get needed rest
    and my man has to go away for awhile on a business trip test
    so i'm lonely and longing for something or someone to be by my side
    just for the fact of knowing that love's song can survive...

    no room mate's in here, she left yesterday and was happy as she could be
    i was so envious with rage, it seemed everyone could leave but me
    so in my deepest low of the night i cried out to God and finally asked why
    and after my tantrum i sat in silence and the bitter tears stung my eyes
    in the midst of the flood i heard a voice gently and softly say
    that i was put to this test to be prepared for my future days
    after this i was speechless and i silently cried and became angry with myself
    because for days now i had been bitter and blamed God for how i felt...

    in the room i started to think of all the thing i've done in my life
    the good and the bad and the happy and sad, that gave God much strife
    i finally realized what i had to do inspite the state of my health
    i realized that when i die i want to be included in God's wealth
    so i climbed off the bed and went down on my knees to silently talk to my God
    and i didn't exactly know what to say without sounding a little odd...

    so i started to say what was on my heart and mind at the time
    i said God i surrender everything to you that i have in me intertwined...

    i surrender my whole body as a sign of benevolence
    i surrender my whole soul as a sign of reference
    i surrender the gift of my voice that you have given me
    i surrender the gift of my love that you gave so willingly
    i surrender everything thing that i have and everything that i owe
    i surrender the earthly things that i love to forever show
    i surrender this, hoping that you see that i am indebted to you
    and i surrender my love, myself, my all, my EVERYTHING is for you...
     
  2. emprezz

    emprezz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderfully versed. At some point we all must surrender.

    Peace and Blessings!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed we all surrender to face our facts & fate
    this was sweetly written form da room of lonelyness
    but the best part is
    one still here to be thankful of
    i love it when u express ya emotions
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks emprezz...thats so very tru!
     
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    Oh, that was very very nice. I tell myself too that he does these things to put is to the test. I am happy you feel that way, God is smiling on his daughter today. I am glad that the doctors feel you're gettin better!! YAY!!!
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oops i didn't see you rich!

    thanks alot...i just wanted to write what was on my heart and what happened to me.....:)
     
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    Yo, LovelyGoldenOne that was a tyte flo'. Again I will put you in my prayers. Believe in your quote that "love will conquer death" and it will.
    Love and Peace,
    Foxy
     
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    I applaud you Lovely, Golden, One
    Whom I will always keep in my heart
    Until time itself surrenders-
     
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    This is Beautiful
     
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    :heart: Beautifully Expressive.....:)
     
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