Black Poetry : I Still think of You From Time to Time, Melody

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I still think of you from time to time Melody.
    Lost, maybe, but definitely turned out
    Wasn't even out of high school
    Acting like you knew what life was about.
    You were a friend of a friend
    I knew enough about you to care
    You complained your real parents gave
    you up, and being adopted just wasn't fair
    You got pregnant when you were about 15
    Fatherhood was not for your friend
    And these strange guys started coming round
    What kind of message did that send?
    Once the darling daughter was born
    at first you seemed to be adjusting all right.
    But then you started staying out later
    and later more often during the night.
    My friend, your daughter's Godmother,
    babysat for you whenever she had the chance
    The child looked just like you, beautiful
    smile, sparkling eyes that would dance.
    My friend said that she heard you were
    walking the streets. I didn't want to believe it.
    Then one day, we saw you, on Mass Avenue...
    A trace of youth was left, I suppose you were a hit
    17 with a bullet, often requested, often played.
    You told the other "ladies" you'd be back in a few.
    My friend whispered for me not to say anything.
    I stared bewildered, not knowing what to do.
    It's not that I felt that I shouldn't speak....
    I couldn't speak
    I felt so hurt, my knees were so weak
    you could have knocked me over with a feather
    The two said goodbye, I mumbled something
    resembling the same, as she rejoined the "ladies"
    on the avenue and the quota she had to bring.
    Months later, my friend heard she was dancing
    on a pole, I suppose she moved up in the ranks.
    She actually asked me if I wanted to go see her,
    I said, "Are you crazy? No thanks."
    Her daughter was being raised by her adoptive parents,
    the same situation that filled her with hate.
    Isn't it ironic, don't you think, that she
    handed her daughter the same fate.
    I still think of you from time to time, Melody.
     
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    This resonates deeply, watz. Crazy, the patterns some pass on. Very nicely laid down.
     
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    Of course you would think of her from time to time, because you allowed your heart to befriend her, and naturally your mother mode had to come into play. yet we know not the load she carries...so sad, so young...what will the girl...with the girl, become. That's so heartbreaking.
     
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    man, life is so crazy...I agree with gempis....tight floe
     
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    Thank you gempis, yes, the patterns that we cast down, what a shame.
    Thanks for your response queentswana. This actually happened many moons ago, when I was a teenager myself, so that little girl is an adult now. Don't know what became of either of them, but I can only hope and pray that God stepped in.
    Yes, SwtT truth can be stranger than fiction, thanks for your reply.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Watz...

    You did a very good job of expressing your thoughts and depicting this situation. You seem to be a very good story teller. Do you write short stories?

    :thanks: for sharing a part of your past with us.

    :toast:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, Monetary, I used to write short stories, but I haven't written one for a number of years. I have to pay too much attention to details. Thanks for your kind response on this piece.
     
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    this came off like a page from my life story book
    i hear ya and feel ya flowin from within
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So, you knew someone in this situation too Rich? Doesn't it just make ya wanna holla? Thanks for letting me know you felt this one.
     
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    ya know sista I think that all off us know someone somewhere who is like that :( sad indeed I loved the details in the picture you portrayed sista :) I know I may regret this...but i must say...I agree with monetary I think you could write some amazing short stories :)
     
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