Black Poetry : I see you...I watch

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  1. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see you...I watch...

    you running around..don't know whether
    your coming or going..giving yourself to
    every man that looks...trying to find a
    father for your little one...can't keep a job...
    no health insurance...

    I see you...I watch...

    as you crimp and crawl...momma done gave up
    ...no father at all..trying to get up over the wall..
    while the little one cries...no food at all...

    I see you...I watch...

    while he beats you...and pimps you...
    you no good "B****"...thinking that he
    really gives a sh**...

    I see you...I watch...

    crying...crawled into a ball...
    can't take no more pain....none at all...
    ready to go...nowhere to hide....
    nowhere to run...so you grab the gun...

    I see you...I watch...
    as they take your coffin out....
    pass the people...momma on the ground...
    crying..."Lord why?"...

    I see you...I watch...
    as I grab the little one's hand
    and lead her away...

    I watch...
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, this is deep Rico, life in a match box, ready to ignite,leaving behind a little one, crying for Momma in the night.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep reality check !
    often we see this
    momma da baby only hope .....
     
  4. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, man... im speechless. i wanna say sumthin but i just dont know what. but i like it, its just man....
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :( I know Rico I know....just let it all out.....deep piece poet
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a tyte piece...wow...
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was deep...and your flow was tight.
     
  8. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is serious....
     
  9. NADIA*BINTA

    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heartfelt.... a reality many of us can't or won't see... thankx for this message... really felt this flow :(...

    peace
     
  10. Shango

    Shango Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah Rico this is some mind provoking s*** here and it'ssad that situations in life can bring a child down this road........I like the way you flowed with this....................thanks for the read
     
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