Black Poetry : I saw Life

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  1. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On the way to the corner store i saw Life
    I saw her
    I saw her in the blue collar brotha
    home from a hard days work,
    shoulders drawn tight,
    paycheck crushed in a hard fist, insufficient to say the least.
    eyes hopeless under drawn brows, as he rushes to a waiting wife.

    I saw her in the crack fiend
    mumbling past me
    fighting demons only he can see
    In his world, beauty is in a needle and love and laughter
    comes soon after.
    his fix is his anaesthesia, but she is one hard M*****

    I saw her in the prostitute
    her *** barely covered
    in that skin tight, bright bright, ima get some tricks tonite
    shorts skirt
    trying to work her charms(hmmph what charms?)
    on some hustler brother, who is willin to pay the dollar for her favors.

    I saw her in the teenage girl
    not quite sixteen
    she want to be a beauty queen, cause it better than what life has given her it seems
    for school is an option, money is a luxury
    beside she got to to do what she gotta
    cause baby on the way and the daddy just left her.

    I saw her in the little kid
    sitting on the stoop
    absorbing evaluating all this in his unformed mind
    to comprehend this and live it is a decision that is already made
    the phony pleasures the street offer
    there is no give and take

    On my way to the cornerstore
    i saw Life
    and despite the fact im feelin her
    she aint much to look at at all.
     
  2. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    I love this piece

    welcome :wave:

    pd :)
     
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    usin' the naked eye, i feel the same as you peep...

    tyte
     
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    deflavaful.


    ...isn't it amazin' how life shows us some different
    **** everyday? ...& most times... it ain't too pretty!

    anywho! i enjoyed the read... immense-ly.
    thank you for sharing. :)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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    dis here was all dat & some loved it.
     
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    A very heartfelt piece of reality.


    Coco :heart:
     
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    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx for the love ppl
    i always appreciate genuine criticism
    keep it comin' and dont lose that Flava
    1 love
     
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    I saw Life

    On the way to the corner store i saw Life
    I saw her
    I saw her in the blue collar brotha
    home from a hard days work,
    shoulders drawn tight,
    paycheck crushed in a hard fist, insufficient to say the least.
    eyes hopeless under drawn brows, as he rushes to a waiting wife.

    I saw her in the crack fiend
    mumbling past me
    fighting demons only he can see
    In his world, beauty is in a needle and love and laughter
    comes soon after.
    his fix is his anaesthesia, but she is one hard M*****

    I saw her in the prostitute
    her *** barely covered
    in that skin tight, bright bright, ima get some tricks tonite
    shorts skirt
    trying to work her charms(hmmph what charms?)
    on some hustler brother, who is willin to pay the dollar for her favors.

    I saw her in the teenage girl
    not quite sixteen
    she want to be a beauty queen, cause it better than what life has given her it seems
    for school is an option, money is a luxury
    beside she got to to do what she gotta
    cause baby on the way and the daddy just left her.

    I saw her in the little kid
    sitting on the stoop
    absorbing evaluating all this in his unformed mind
    to comprehend this and live it is a decision that is already made
    the phony pleasures the street offer
    there is no give and take

    On my way to the cornerstore
    i saw Life
    and despite the fact im feelin her
    she aint much to look at at all.




    ---------------------JUST IN CASE YALL AINT F$$#ING CATCH IT DA FIRST TIME!!!!

    FLAVZ---THIS PIECE WAS ONE A DA BEST MOVING ONES I SAW SOOO FAR....
    WOW....I MEAN, LIKE WHERE CAN I FIND YA??!!LOL

    NAH FOREAL--ON THA SERIOUS NOTE--THIS PICE WAS ABSOLUTELY TOUCHING......I'M NOT EVEN FEELIN YA....IM ACTUALLY RIGHT THERE WIT YA ON THIS ONE....


    giv it to em 1 mo' time....cuz i dont think they saw life like u did.......1 luv
     
  9. INcogniTO

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    I likes dis Here Poet!

    I feel ya!! :toast:
     
  10. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You make me see life

    In these words that you have laid down for us to absorb ......



    nice flow here :)
     
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