Black Poetry : ...I Saw Him...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Jul 26, 2004.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw him
    Sexy debonair
    Built and muscular
    Waist kinda slim
    Low cut hair
    Thick eyebrows
    Shaped with flair
    In my eyes
    Perfect in clothes
    I saw him
    Intricately shaped nose
    I wanted him
    Hands so thick
    Long fingers
    What else was thick?
    My thoughts lingered
    Walking with a stride
    I breathed him
    I fantasized of his breath when
    I'm on top
    And I straddle
    When I don't stop
    His climax travels
    But he doesn't know
    I want him
    He doesn't even
    Notice my smile
    Not a hint even
    That I'm worth his while
    I pass him
    He glances my way
    Up and down
    He studies my style
    Sides and back down
    His eyes prowl
    I question him
    With a raised eyebrow
    His eyes grow dim
    Hesitant now
    He comes forward
    My heart skips beats
    I've waitin' for it
    For him to come to me
    Maybe after awhile
    He can come differently
    Sweating as he smiles
    After pleasuring me
    My fantasy is stopped
    As he stands in my face
    My heart is locked
    My fantasies erased
    A ring on his finger
    Of sacred matrimony
    He sees my fallen demeanor
    And stares down naturally
    I wish that was the end
    But he kindly says to me
    I wanted to let you in
    On knowing you're a gorgeous lady
    I tentatively smile
    Under his pleasant flattery
    But then he forms his mouth
    Saying yes I'm married….

    But not to a lady…..

    All I could do was laugh...

    Today's he's my best friend and I love him like a brother…..
     
  2. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :lol::lol: man, I was mad for ya...when you said that he was married

    But it's cool ya'll got:love: for one another:)
     
  3. Lloyd

    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol

    For sure itz really funny!I was thinkin' about a sad thing n...u've surprized me!Thanks for that!
     
  4. HODEE

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    This is cool Lovely. I Enjoyed reading this.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so warm and sweetly mixed friendship is wonderful sistah
    u took this beyond my thoughts tyte write LovelyG
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alright, Lovely

    This took an interesting turn. I loved the flow.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like the rest, I was expecting this to take the usual turn, and then you just made a u-turn on all of us. This was so creative, and flowed so easily. I really liked this scribe.
     
  8. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah, this was tight, and a bit humorous :laugh: this piece had me smiling...okay, okay... I mean :laugh: :laugh: but it was nice and different. thanks for sharing that one.
     
  9. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aiight ma, This is totally excellent. Im truly diggin this piece.
     
  10. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo, I luv to read you lovely....dis was truly tha bomb!!!!!!!!!