Black Poetry : I Saw Heaven

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  1. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When our bodies and our minds intertwined
    We set off something so ferociously divine
    I saw your breath caress the air I breathe
    Dancing to a rythm, only u and I could hear
    Instantaneously my eyes gained the strength
    Of a thousand full moons
    And as I stepped out into this new reality
    I saw a beautiful green carpet of Spring
    Laid out in front of me
    Ready to receive footsteps of a queen
    I heard the songs of the birds
    Sing to me every sky blue morning
    And mentally I sang along
    I touched the hottest flame of the Summer
    Delicately with my tongue
    As I slowly explored your Nubian soul
    I felt the gentle winds of Fall
    Softly kiss my face and whisper
    I love you…I love you…I love you
    I noticed the beauty of the Winter
    As melting icicles dangled from the trees
    Like sparkling diamonds conversing with the sun
    I couldn’t believe I've never seen
    All that forever lay before me
    And now
    Sadly through your departure I am now blinded
    Back into the jaded illusion of cloudy grey skies
    And for the first time I realized
    Through you, with you, and because of you
    I saw heaven
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    JUST BEAUTIFUL .................
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Rich!! Insomnia inspires poetry!! :lol:
     
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    You took us through all the seasons of love. Your words have such depth to them poet, wonderful.
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, I only found this depth in one man and I had to express it!
     
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    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this poem was definitely hot
     
  7. Prizefighter16

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    such a vivid use of expression...the image portrayed in this work was heavenly....
    :angel1:
    keep the flow goin

    word from mz.soull aka prizefighter :cool:
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    um this is good i felt this piece and i especially liked

    I touched the hottest flame of the Summer
    Delicately with my tongue
    As I slowly explored your Nubian soul

    um can i use that sometimes? lololololol

    heaven saw that this was written by a true mac
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Prizefighter, Bigdrizzle and Dastreesoulja I'm glad u guys enjoyed it

    Da Street Souljah-I liked that line the best too, no macking just love! :lol: :roll:
     
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