Black Poetry : I retire

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by caramelpython, May 29, 2004.

  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I Retire​


    Light's growing dimmer around my ring,
    Sweat dripping from hard battles with no victory song to sing.

    Battled scared and brused my better days have passed,
    Competition is getting stronger and faster at this pace I wont last.

    In my prime I was a beast and nobody could win,
    I was Mr 2nd round knockout when I checked their chin.

    I retired many fighters who were in or past their prime,
    Called me ESPN, HBO and Mr Showtime.

    Nobody could theese hands when theese blows would crash,
    Hell who am I kidding..... I know my better days have passed.

    Left to the body A right to the chin,
    Left to the tempel another right for the win.
    Left on the canvas the whole ring starts to spin,
    Right on my own back, can I get up before 10?

    Right leg shake'n Left leg a maby,
    Got an standing 8 count before the bell saves me.
    "Champ shake it off", Is what my corner man implies
    "You got this one champ", Why they telling me lies?

    I'm boxing a younger version of myself I see it in his eyes,
    I'm in the declining years of my career, he's on the rise!

    Bell rings for round 4, "I guess them want war"!
    If he wants to win this fight then war is in store.
    My jab's and hooks start to score more and more,
    He responds with A blow I know my jaws not connected any more!

    BLACK OUT!

    The ring doctor is asking,
    Lights from cameras flashing,
    Champ are you ok? Can you hear what I'm asking?
    I can only nod because my jaws not fastened.

    Next day after the fight I walk through the news reporters fire,
    Champ what happned?
    What's your next move?
    I's A rematch what you desire?
    With one statement I reply " I plan to retire"


    caramelpython
    05/29/04
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very creative flow it was a win!!!!!
    tight CP
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Python

    I really like this one, it is very creative, the floE, your style, and the subject was very good.

    :bowdown: Wonderful job my brother :bowdown:
     
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    What seems like the best days behind a person could just be a momentary slump. Lots of creativity here, keep your flows coming.
     
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    awesome drop bruh u really did it here
     
  6. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mzblkangel.........Thank you angel "I do what I can do when I can do it"

    Nita............... I just wanted to try somthing different than my normal flow :thanks:

    watzinaname......So true sister I just wanted to try it from a defeatest perspective :thanks:

    $$RICH$$...........Thanks 4 the complement my brother :toast: and :thanks: I guess trying to switch up my flow some! :bowdown:
     
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    and yes you..... :rolling:and you do it well
    what a poetic suit you wear..... :bomb:
    had me thinkin i watchin a movie....
    do the dang thang......
     
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    sounds like i can see it in a movie or somethin
    good switch my brotha
    had me thinking u were retiring from the writing game
    for a minute
     
  9. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mzblkangel........... Thank you Lady TY :grouphug:

    thespokesman.. mY brother I thank you also, Not going to leave this pen N pad alone just yet. Once again I thank you "You know I think highly of ya flows" Dap'z :flamet:
     
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    It's so nice to read some new subject matter...
    and with such great style and story line
    you pulled the reader right in...
    Nice underlying message about victories won
    and how time is of the essence...
    as well as wisdom...

    Much enjoyed, Sage
     
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