Quiet Poetry Lounge : i once knew a birdie*

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thepoetsean, Jun 24, 2001.

  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i once knew a birdie

    she sat upon my
    mental window scene--
    and blew kisses--

    she made me feel surrounded in happiness--
    whenever i made contact with she...

    it seemed as if we *felt* in stride*
    although i hardly knew her

    i knew her.*

    we flew together--
    and i have never had wings
    and had never seen an airplane in my lifetime...

    but
    nowadays
    the sunshine is tinted--
    because that same birdie--
    is more out of than...
    in my...mental...window...scene--
    i caused that flight

    and it still hurts--
    hurts
    to think it.
    hurts to speak it.

    and the worst of it all is...

    birdie won't come back.

    (come back birdie)


    sean.
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thepoetsean

    Things happen for a reason... (you already know this though)

    Maybe that *birdie won't come back to you now, but you at least know what it is that you don't want to lose again...

    This is a lovely picture!

    Thanks.
     
  3. KentuckianKween

    KentuckianKween Active Member MEMBER

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    this was absolutely gorgeous... the first stanza made me smile... the last made my heart frown... you evoked a lotta emotion; sign of a great poet... fabaliss :)
     
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    awww you poor thing...Bird come only for seasons..and when the seasons change they go away...You need to find something that can adapt. LOL Naw but on the real..Great piece!!!!:p
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wowww, sean. i feel this melancholy....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    IS THAT A RED ROBIN

    WOW!! I SEE COMING YO WAY
    CATCH HOLD AND CARESS DES LOVE BIRDIE...:heart:
     
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    lmao @ Richy Rich

    man you trippin'

    LOL

    poeticsean this was so beautiful

    i loved reading every word

    line for line

    pd
     
  8. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2, kentuckianKween, shaneak, LISTER, RICH, and peedee(pd)

    *group hug*

    how could i ever return the love i'm given...

    thank u all...


    sean.
     
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    :rolleyes: :rolleyes: :rolleyes:
    THIS IS SOOO SWEET!!!!!!
    I REALLY LIKE THIS PIECE
    OF WORK. IT REALLY STIRS UP
    SYMPATHY IN THE READER. I
    DON'T KNOW IF THAT IS
    WHAT U WERE AIMING FOR,
    BUT IT DOES. IT'S REALLY
    NICE. U KNOW I'M NOSY THOUGH,
    wHO U TALKIN' BOUT? THIS POEM
    IS SO SWEET IT MAKES ME WANNA
    GO FIND HER AND BRING HER BACK
    TO U. THEN AGAIN, MAYBE THE BIRDIE
    DOESN'T SYMBOLIZE A GIRL? EITHER
    WAY, TIGHT WORK!!!
    :rolleyes: :rolleyes: :rolleyes:

    :kiss: ESHA :kiss:
     
  10. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    touch your nose blackstar...

    how do you know that it isn't YOU???


    sean.

    *distappearsintothincyberair
     
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