Black Poetry : I Offer You my Heart

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  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’ve been battered and abused,
    Belittled and Used,
    Yet when I’m in your arms,
    It all fades away,
    In my eyes you can do no harm,

    My guard is still up,
    But my body has been absorbing you,
    From the beginning of time,
    You’ve tainted my heart,
    Kissed my soul,
    All I want is you,
    To have and to hold,
    You’ve been hurt ,
    And I’ve been too.

    So open your heart,
    And I will do the same,
    All I want is love,
    And maybe your last name.
    That was a joke!
    See made you smile…

    Let me take care of you,
    And kiss your wounds,
    Share each others heart,
    Together make a new start.
    I’m here, .........handing you my heart.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Captivated as a reader reading each line the only question Im asking myself is what will you hit us with next time. Thanks for sharing.
     
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    To earnestly offer someone your heart, even though it's been bruised in the past, yet looking forward to a warm future. Very endearing write scribe, flow on.
     
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    I felt the emotion in this piece...know what thats all about. Nice scribe...flow on :eek:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling the deep side of a heart speaking loud
    when we offer our heart it's true love....well felt
     
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    Poet...

    You really warmed my heart with this piece. It feels so sweet and assuring when you tell someone that the past doesn't matter because it's all about our future, and this is the way you make me feel... Love at it's greatest... Thank You.
     
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    Awww, you really touched me with this one. Tight flow too, sis. Much love to you.
     
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    finding that love that loves you through and through is a beautiful thing sister :)
     
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