Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Need A Working TITLE... Please

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by N2urSoul, Jun 27, 2001.

  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I arrive at home
    my senses are
    describing the
    unexplainable ~
    guiding my steps
    as I entered the
    house ~ shaping my
    thoughts

    There were distinctive
    scents that filled several
    rooms in our home

    aloe
    and eucalyptus --
    -- maybe even a hint of
    sweet cicesly
    which
    christened the foyer

    crumbled bath salts
    lined
    the hallway
    floor and
    stuck to the
    bottom of
    my bare feet
    as I
    passed over
    them-- they told
    me stories of deceit
    and I tried not to listen

    I followed
    the broken
    aroma
    of Bay Rum
    that misted
    the air and it lured me
    to our private
    resting place

    and the closer
    I got to the
    bedroom I could
    feel the droplets
    sprinkling
    my body
    with bitter-thick
    accents of a
    liquored rain forest

    I was ~ absorbed

    For it was my senses
    that described the
    unexplainable that
    day... ~
    shaping my thoughts -
    molding my uneasy sway

    ...but
    before I could digest
    all that I took in
    I made my
    way to the bedroom--
    reaching out my
    hand to turn the
    stiff knob
    opening the naughty-pine
    wooden door

    The other senses I own
    did not prepare me for
    what the 'line of sight'
    had in store

    You and ... she
    were ... ~~



    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    DES BE BEAUTIFUL

    I'LL BE THINKING OF A TITLE
    PROMISED TO HIT U BACK
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy

    I'm glad you like this poem... however it's "fiction"....
    this scenario has never happened to me personally...

    I am capturing thoughts and images
    of things that "could" happen or that
    "are" possible ... and expanding them out--
    working on thinking "outside of the box"...
    but yet, making things seems very real and
    tangible to readers...

    So if it touched you -- that's great...
    but remember, not everything a writer
    writes -- means that it has to have happend
    to them directly ~

    My personal life experiences are always
    going to be limited in some form or fashion,
    so I tend to draw on ideas...possibilities...etc.


    Thanks for the love though gurl!!
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2....

    you know what i think before i even say it....

    EVERY thing you do is off da chain mane!! :)

    i've definitely missed your flow!

    AlwaysLove.
    SunShyne~
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THE SIXTH(SICK) SENSE

    ...I sensed deceit
    in tangled garments
    musky pheremones and
    moans "other than my own"
    wafted in on
    black love incense
    and the "Isley Brothers"
    greatest hits
    serenaded
    the reality of
    our love faded
    you two
    braded together
    like......

    disconnected
    I pull out...full of hate
    the chrome ....38
    you say....

    WAIT !!!


    .......too late.....


    On A Continuous Journey
    GYPSYMAN
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "Senses detecting Sin"

    "Why don't senses lie sometimes?"

    I don't know yet this was a nice piece.

    one
     
  7. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    did i see what i dought i saw
    or maybe
    Wasn't me
    or
    oop's did put dat bullet in your ***, my baaaad
     
  8. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy~

    Not a problem gurlie~
    Thanks again!!
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA~

    Sustah-friend... I thank you... your commentz mean alot!

    I appreciate the re-affirming
    responses! :wink:

    Thanx! One :heart:
     
  10. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gypsy

    Hey sweetie... this sounds like the making of another R. Kelly & Isley mini video ... CHU KNOW DAT RYGHT?! :lol:

    :heart:n' the way you workin' me
    ova-tyme -- all day erry day Boo!!
     
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