Black Poetry : I must have been a fool

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I must be a fool
    Cause all this time
    I thought that your earth
    Revolved around my sun
    But in reality my moon
    Revolved around your world

    I must have been a fool
    Because I thought that love
    Was suppose to bring us
    Closer together
    But in stead you say
    You fell out of love.

    I must have been a fool
    Cause I was under the impression
    That we both
    Were special people
    Only to find out that
    We are just ordinary people

    Like John Legend said
    Take it slow
    Something we both
    Thought we did
    But in reality didn’t.

    Now I sit here
    Reminiscing about the days we spent
    I miss your presents, your thoughts, and your spirit
    You say you need time
    To think things through

    And to be honest I don’t mind
    In fact, I even understand
    But the thing that makes me sad
    Is the fact that you want to be alone
    And I wonder why

    All I know is I love you
    From the smallest fiber
    Of you skin
    To the in depth of your soul
    I wonder, how can this be wrong
    [I]
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was :heart: BEAUTIFUL:heart:
     
  3. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks you I really don't even know what to say except when you go through hardships beautiful poems come out of them. Again thanks
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so beautiful because it was so raw. I felt your words here poet, and they were so touching.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very smooth and sweet tyte drop poet
     
  6. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can only write about how I feel
     
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    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re:Fool

    This is such a heartfelt poem. You will be okay. Time heals all wounds.
     
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    I feel u completely on this poem. This is exactly how I felt about my exboyfriend when we broke up a month ago. Don't worry u will get through it. This poem was great. It not only helps us know how u feel but for those who feel like that you capture it.
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Write yo heart out man becaue this piece was truly full of heart!
    Great Read.
     
  10. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In writing how you feel, I see a beutiful soul! :rolling:
     
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