Black Poetry : **** I Miss You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Alizentang, Jul 10, 2003.

  1. Alizentang

    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was written for my best friend/ex who committed suicide a year ago...I was highly intoxicated...just bear with me. :)


    Dear Teary Eyes,

    If only I could go back in time
    When all your love and time was mine
    Took your own life cause it hurt TOO bad
    Now I sit here a year later and still i'm sad
    Wish that I could kiss those lips one last time
    Reminisin on days when your heart was mine
    Thinkin back on head while cookin dinner
    We lived our life hard, but you died a sinner
    So, when Judgement day comes where will YOU go?
    I would give up Heaven for you, just so you know
    I love you Teary, miss you so much
    Days I was weak, you were my crutch
    Committed murder cause the ***** tried to kill me
    Wish I could find the same in this S.O.G.
    You gave me away to him and I never even knew
    Now when I look in his eyes, all I see is you
    I'm trying to go by all you taught me
    But true love is something that he don't believe
    Help me babygirl, take my heart and be strong
    Cause with all of this drama, my life won't last long
    I tried to save him, like I tried with you
    And if I don't succeed I'm joining you
    I can't take it no mo
    To the Devil I almost sold my soul
    I'm tryin to move on and change but ****! it's hard
    And since you took your life, ****..I'm scarred
    This is just a thought, sent to you...
    Where ever you are...**** I miss you!
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feeling the depth of your flow girl.........................
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang...........:grouphug:
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dis is deep gurl.....
     
  5. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey Alizentang..feeling this deep...let it flow...
    Peace
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wrote a poem like this...same thing happened to my friend...nice flow...
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wooooooooooooah,this was tyte.
     
  8. Alizentang

    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you everyone for the support and responses. Lovely...was the piece posted?
     
  9. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feeling the flow of your pain.
    Much Love
    Rico
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    let's do that again :grouphug:

    *whoa*
     
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