Black Poetry : I MADE ME OVER

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  1. FINDLOVEnMEback

    FINDLOVEnMEback Member MEMBER

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    I was not trying to be, no more than what I thought I needed to be,

    in order to be, somebody that was not really me

    so I made me over,

    thinking that what they seen of me,
    would make me, more worthy to be in their company ,

    in the meantime, too blind to see the beauty that lied in me,
    the blackness , the perfect creation I am, the me God create for the world to see

    yet,

    I didn’t understand,
    that my Clothes didn’t make me
    my sexy swag didn’t confirm me
    my diamonds didn’t shine bright enough to lighten me,
    my long flowing store bought hair didn’t create a white me
    and my big butt did not represent the sensuality in between me

    Yet I fell,
    for the amateur fame,
    walking in the hall of shame,
    playing the look at me game,
    making heart beats stand still at the sound of my name,

    hopefully I don’t sound insane
    but ,my sexiness became my vain

    I was not trying to be
    no more than what I thought I needed to be,
    in order to be somebody, that was not really me

    I made me over thinking that what people seen of me,
    would make me more worthy to be in their company,
    in the meantime lost in what became of me, searching for the perfect me

    I made me over

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    To know of one self to change
    for it's he whom knows thee above
    now u have da will to rearrange
    for get about da walk of fame
    for it was instill in thee all along
    I feel ya realism in ya song
    see now just how strong
    and knowing u truely belong

    rearrange i feel it strong
    this was wit depth and well felt
    u now can live right into da light
    as u shine surely wit a delight
    tis was tyte !!

    wow......poetess
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    finding yourself in amerikkka is difficult

    because sometimes you might think you're "finding" yourself but that "self" is based on lies so what did you really find?

    but you have obviously dug deeper than what lies on the surface you've
    made a complete 360 from the obvious

    i felt you passion here

    your passion to "be real" and your passion to be accepted as such

    and i'm here as a witness

    and i welcome the new "you"

    peace PHILLY
     
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    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice flow here poet
    the way this flows of
    so much conscienceness
    as to the reasons we do what we do
    is felt very deeply here
    Can't say enough about how i dig this
    Preciate ya sharing this one...Nice!
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so many of us...

    ...fall into the trap of WHAT OTHER PEOPLE THINK OF US that we forget that it's WHAT WE THINK OF OURSELF that matters most. and, in trying to deliver to them what they expect, we sometimes neglect the self that we want to be.

    YOU laid this beautifully.

    THANK YOU.
     
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    Each of us have something different that makes us special from day one. This difference can make others feel uncomfortable, and then we think, oh gee, let me change that to fit in. One of the best things we can do is realize how wrong that conclusion is. Loved every line, but these lines:
    whoa...those lines just brought the poem on home. Phenomenal write.
     
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