Black Poetry : I Loved Him

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by eternal, Oct 26, 2003.

  1. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know how I should feel
    Everything seemed so real
    But now the only thing I am sure of
    Is that he was the man I love
    But I cannot continue to give
    To one who is not sensitive
    To the fact that I have human tendencies
    Like not being as perfect as I'd like to be
    Now I could sit and wonder if i am pleasing
    And wonder if my demeanor is teasing
    But why waste the time wondering if I am giving all
    But in true love he may never fall
    I cannot change who I am without slacking
    Because I don't know which aspects are lacking
    And so I find myself alone again.
    Wondering if I am sad...
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice Eternal... thanks for sharing. I read that some place before.. can't recall where. If you can let us know.
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for sharing this with us.....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice piece eternal.....but due to our forum rules without
    the author's permission & name to this piece it must be
    removed it's not allowed...... we as poet's know that if
    work is displayed without permission it's lable as stealing
    surely u did address it's not yours but i have to ask you to remove it ....Thank you
    $R CL/Mod.
     
  5. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I changed the whole poem, last time I wasw here just to let all know.. The former was a poem I reseived via email from a friend who was just brightening my day. The poem above is original.
    Thanks for enjoying it anyway!
     
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    I loved this piece...it captured the
    heart of "all" who have ever fallen
    in love...
     
  7. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Angelicsage, I appreciate the compliment!
     
  8. SPIRITNORTH

    SPIRITNORTH Banned MEMBER

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    this flowed nicely, ,,,,,,i liked it alot
     
  9. PositiveMindset

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    Sister, don't slack.

    There will be that 1 who'll give all the love U give back.

    10 times fold.

    Nice piece.
     
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