Black Poetry : I Love You Gone Wrong

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  1. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love you
    From the deepest depths of my soul
    I love you
    It feels so good to have finally said these words
    Admitting to myself and to you my true feelings
    And my heart feels so free
    Now that it has discovered its destiny lies in you
    And I can see us racing, running towards our eternity
    So glad that this epiphany has unveiled itself
    And then the fire dwindles from inside me, extinguishing itself
    As my heartfelt confession of “I love you”
    Is met with complete and utter death-defying silence
    Your eyes, which are so beautiful, can no longer meet mine
    Unwilling to see the pain and confusion
    And I realize that although I love with every breath in my body
    That I loving you gave my heart the rhythm to beat to any song
    This moment in time was an “I love you” gone wrong
    And now we’ll never be the same, this moment has changed everything
    This “I love you” gone wrong has changed the game
    To the point where we both no longer know the rules
    This is a game we were never supposed to play.
    We were just supposed to be friends, you know, ask about each other’s day
    But that was yesterday and today…I blame my weak heart
    For this “I love you” gone wrong, but I remain strong
    Strong enough to turn and run, too proud to look back
    Leaving the man I love standing frozen in his tracks
    So I never see him shed a tear, nor reach his hand to me
    And into the stillness whisper, “I love you too sweet lady.”

    © NapturallyYours
    August 26, 2007
     
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    1hotvirgowoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm loving this Napturally-and I know exactly how you feel.
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    um

    i can't possibly be mad at cha

    get yours

    nothing wrong with little love

    or alot

    peace

    what i was trying to say even the love went bad

    hey there was love there at one point

    and that's what i meant
     
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    Wondering what is worse, not saying how you truly feel, or admitting your feelings facing the risk of him not feeling the same? I think not saying how you feel is worse in the long run, but that doesn't ease the hurt and disappointment. Feeling this scribe poetess.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sister feelin u more then u know well said
     
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    Napturally:

    Really feeln' you on this joint.
    Been there...Did that...
    But now we're no longer friends.
    That fine line sometimes can't be crossed
    b/c there's no turn' back.

    Very nice write


    Much Luv
     
  7. afroprincess

    afroprincess Active Member MEMBER

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    Could it be?

    Could it be that you peaked into my past and wrote a brief chapter on my life? This was like, so amazingly close to a relationship i had in the past that I can hardly read it without going back to that place. Fantastic job, you were able to transport me to another time and make me feel what was said.
     
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    Napturally_Your New Member MEMBER

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    Oh my goodness....I'm loving this trip down memory lane where I can see all these posts from the past! So interesting to see what was going on in my life then.
     
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