Black Poetry : I knew this

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You don't love me, I knew this years ago
    When I leave you still won't understand
    You had true love in me this I know

    I stayed true
    I always thought of you
    I knew no other could take your place
    I changed my mind
    We are not together at this time
    I know now I can't allow myself to be your fool

    You didn’t have to work at all to capture me.
    I laid myself out for you.
    I made concessions.
    Just for you.

    I thought you were really worth it.
    You asked me to slow down. I did
    You said can you be my only love. You is.

    Me from the city, is that what you liked?
    The ruff edges in my life.
    Now years have passed
    The part that is sad is
    We can’t seem to talk this out.

    You jump right in misunderstanding
    I’m not accusing you, or demanding
    You just don’t see it or understand it
    You are quick to take offense

    Your never first to work on solving this

    See I can love and hate.
    At the same time.
    I have no special powers.
    Separate them in the mind.

    I love you. I am still with you.
    I hate the things you do.

    We can not separate them.
    I agree they are not one, but two.

    You disappoint me with your lack of action.
    How your concerns are never enough.
    Making love to you is the best.
    Your confused hey, I am too.

    I kept my word. I recall what I said.
    I promised to take care of you.
    See as much as I need to leave.
    I have trouble, doing that too.
    We have kids

    This I do know, we can’t go on like this.
    I will be leaving you
    The sad part that tears my heart
    Is you don’t hear me
    It is time
    Yes we are thru

    I have tied so many times to tell you
    Conversations end up bad.
    You take offense
    Only way I think
    you feel you can win
    When the topic turns light on you

    You come crawling
    When you need something
    I don’t see you there for me

    Stop making decisions meant for two
    Then expecting me to cooperate with you

    I can’t do this any more
    To me it highlights the disrespect

    This is a Dear John letter, a goodbye note
    I would tell if you allowed me
    Conversations and communication
    Our children see this,
    I hope it doesn’t mislead them
    Having them think
    All love misleads and is hard
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i can feel this and know it so well as i relate
     
  3. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW Hodee:
    I'm almost speechless. This piece shock me at the core.
    You laid this one out.
    Very nice write poet.


    Much Luv
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This poem went right to the core of something im going through right now. It was nice. Keep the flow goin
     
  5. SmoovVerbiage

    SmoovVerbiage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when sustaining a relationship
    becomes one-sided and all attempts
    to communicate falls on deaf ears.
    Not to mention the decision to end
    it, involves precious children.
    I'm sure many can relate.


    I could definitely feel the emotional
    twisting and pulling in this piece.

    thanks sharing with us



    SmoovV
     
  6. sweettee29

    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HODEE ITS HARD WHEN YOU ARE TRYING TO BREAK LOOSE FROM SOMETHING YOU KNOW DEEP DOWN IN YOUR HEART, BODY, AND SOUL IS NOT HEALTHY. YOU HAVE DRAWN SO MANY EMOTIONS OUT OF ME WITH THIS FLO
    I CAN RELATE BROTHA!
    CONFUSING ISN'T IT WHEN YOU KNOW WHAT YOU HAVE TO DO BUT THE REALITY OF ACTUALLY DOING IT (LEAVING) TAKES SO MUCH COURAGE

    DON'T LOOK BACK, JUST LOOK TO THE FUTURES OF YOUR CHILDREN

    SWEETTEE, LOVE

    P.S. I TRULY ADMIRE YOU FOR POSTING THIS ONE

    THANK YOU
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Definitely felt this Hodee, all changes are hard, but especially those things that years ago, you wouldn't have dreamed you'd be changing. Potently posed.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dont say go dont leave
    Im here to retrieve

    What was lost
    Im tired of trying to be the boss

    I need you and you need me
    You really dont want to be free
    You complete me

    Like I complete you
    I know now Im the fool

    Sometimes I just let pride take over
    and Im sorry if I treated you like rover

    But Hodee we cant do this
    I will miss
    the kids will miss

    The fun time we have
    Our special nytes in the tub when were taking our baths

    Hodee my pen is writing so fast
    Because our love have to last
    I dont want you to be my past
    Im ready to put myself on blast

    Because Baby I want you to come home
    The kids need you, and I dont want to be alone

    Without the man who gave me his word
    Even tho I get on your nerves

    But Baby if you know like I know
    You will never say goodbye!!!!!
     
  9. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    sometimes relationships

    do dwindle

    and you have to get off the train
    at the next to the last stop

    yea it was once great
    but that time has passed

    people change
    and are not prepared

    good write poet
     
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