Black Poetry : I just don't understand it...

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  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don’t understand it
    Can’t quite grasp it
    Why do I care if
    Your love ain’t lastin’
    Why do I do this?
    Get so attached then
    My old selfishness
    Makes it not last when
    I’m drownin’ and fallin’
    My mind keeps on fadin’
    I don’t understand it
    Don’t know why I do it
    Cuz in the end it just hurts me
    And in the end I just hurt me
    Things go good ‘til the end
    ‘til I burn it away like some trend
    Cuz in the end you’ll be alright
    And in the end I’ll be alone another night….
    I just don’t understand it
    i just know i can't stand it...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was nice enjoyed the read felt the disappoint n pain
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we can't understand love or why
    but often feel it and the affects i feel ya here
    take this hug sweetie
     
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  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the comments everybody...and i wanted the poem to be simplistic madrapper...thats what i was aiming for instead of a wide vocabulary...i wanted to keep it simple to constrast the confusion of the topic...but thanks for the advice
     
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    i've been there....whut i did was get me a plant.....

    and since then,no more lonliness.......

    when it grows in the sunlight ,each more every day,it reminds me of how much i'll grow.....and how much i wont,if im in the dark........

    stay in the sunlight sweetheart,stay in the sunlight...and grow..

    beautiful peice........
     
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    im feelin that poem. serious emotions. i feel like that all the time. snaps!
     
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    re: I

    This is a serious poem filled with disappointments.
     
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