Black Poetry : I Just Can't - http://blog.myspace.com/dyslexicandwhat

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  1. waynethomas

    waynethomas Active Member MEMBER

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    I Just Can't
    By W. Thomas


    I can't be alone with you,
    Cause when the moon takes up that fixed position in the sky,
    His reflection can be seen in your eyes,
    And it makes it impossible to look away from you,

    To lose that connection with you,
    So attracted
    I can't even move to the other side of the bench away from you,
    Lady if only you knew,
    The amount of control I use to keep my hands off you.

    So is there any point in me fighting?
    Nuzzled in your neck is a place I'm wanting,
    Where my tongue to your hidden spot can go searching,
    And when found, and you're feeling like I'm feeling,
    You won't start all that twitching and giggling!

    But with your bottom lip between mine trembling,
    I don't know if out this cold we need to direct our bearing,
    Or shall I continue to create this out door setting,
    But now the questions of your mood no longer need debating,
    As I'm feeling the direction you have your writing hand heading…


    You like? Let Me Know!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome to da flow of love to honor as i bless this piece

    Tyte joint u scribe look to read more of you soon as love is given
    do share da same love in return to ya fellow poets within ....nice very nice continue
    again welcome Waynethomas
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fight as we may, sometimes a soul can control another like the moon controls the tides. I'm enjoying your pen.
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome to destee! I loved your scribe... man.. i cant wait for love again.. man do i miss these poems of passion and desire.. yet intimate beyond the physical, kudos!
    -Poetic:rolleyes:
     
  5. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    like the part where you said, I can't be alone with you!, ha ha ha and you won't start all that twitching and giggling.

    i guess this is my memory lane day, today.

    good write. thanks for the read.

    desert storm
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like....I like...I like
    Keep them coming.
    :)
     
  7. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ... welcome waynethomas:wave:

    This piece is seeping with passion. I did enjoy:spinstar:

    :tennis:


     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im really feeling the flow on these piece nice work one of the best i have read in a minute
    8/10
     
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