Black Poetry : I have a dream...

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  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is probably just part of my dream...I had a little bit of troubled explaining it. It seems a bit unfinished...maybe my fam could help me out a bit :help:


    [I have a dream…
    That one day,
    You would open your eyes,
    And finally realize that it’s me…
    That you need,
    To constantly plant the seed,
    Of love and adoration in your life.
    Not to try and ‘finish’ you,
    And not to diminish you,
    Because of my high-class status,
    But to show you that,
    After God,
    You’re the important thing that matters,
    To me.

    I have a dream…
    That one day,
    I would walk down the aisle,
    To meet your proud smile.
    Wearing the color that signifies I’m pure,
    And so you would be assured,
    That I saved myself for you.
    We would hold hands in front of the minister,
    And I’ll hold the same hand,
    When I’m having your son and his sister.

    I have a dream…
    That one day,
    Me and you,
    Could be a reality
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this dream can come true and it look completed to me
    love the dreamy flow on this ya dear one will be awaiting
    u at the alter much luv to dis piece just sweet and beautiful
     
  3. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm diggin this sis. Good work
     
  4. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful......... :spin:
    What a nice dream....now make it come true :spin:

    Nice piece

    Monad.poetress
     
  5. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much..I'm glad that u thought it was completed. Trust me...if i knew how to make it come tru i would. I'm hopin that it would just happen.
     
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    hope faith and in due time it shall come true in the
    most sweetest and romantic way much love to dis flow
     
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    Reply to Chastity

    Chastity, the reality that you speak of and seek
    You’ve painted delightfully using great poetic technique
    My hope is that what you seek is manifested in reality
    And the mate that touches you deep is full of vitality


    Great poem you have made
    Now go and seize a great day

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You

    If you read and replied once!
    Do it again, kick up a notch!----------Thank you
     
  8. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like

    I like poems like this 'cause I'm also waiting for the day I get married to my "prince"...just seems like everytime I think I have found Mr. Right, he's actually Mr. Wrong. But there's hope..just make sure you're not searching for a man because a man that findeth a woman findeth a good thing. Just wait and be of good courage. God Bless.
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was awfully sweet, and you know, one day it won't be a dream, and you'll look back on this poem and smile.
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

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    i really liked this...
     
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