Black Poetry : i hate it when you do that

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, May 13, 2003.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i hate it when you do that
    start to flow and then pull back
    we can laugh and sit back
    but when she walks in the door
    she makes your head spin
    your feet leave the floor
    and then i'm sitting there by myself
    beggin' for more
    more laughter more jokes more intimate time
    when you consider making me yours
    briefly and i would probably take it
    but then she walks in the door
    and you forget that i am alive
    it still gets under my skin after all this time
    how you go off into space taking in her every line
    until she hurts you again next time
    then who do you run to?
    you'll come running to me
    i want to believe this time it's over
    desperately
    i warm up to you little by little
    next thing you know i go from back to middle
    to almost up front...first vision in your line
    but then i hate it when you do that
    start to flow and then pull back
    in the middle of us laughing and sittin back
    she walks in the door...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    shaking my head (((((O))))))
    dis was a awesome read
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dayummmmmmmm nice flow nice flow i feel this one i hate it when she walks in the door peace and blessins gurl keep flowin
     
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    I've been here...and it hurts....you let your heart soar with hope and then...it plummets back to the ground with a big thump....

    K
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all so much for feeling my words...i appreciate it more than you know.
     
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    Red, this was a nice flow and im really feelin you....By the way..
    I'd step up and slap him
    Hit him and jab him
    It's obvious he's stuck in the clouds
    Maybe he wants you..he just doesn't know how...

    think on it and make that move girl!
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayum gyrl truer words have neva been spoken...I related so well I read it TWICE :)
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks...you know how it is...thank you everyone for reading me.
     
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    embrace_me New Member MEMBER

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    I can identify. I have been the one who walked in the door and the one dissed waiting for my next turn, but "nowisee", cause I love me!

    This was tight.
     
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    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    real nice flow...I know some dudes that do this with their mama's. Don't get me wrong. I have no prob with mama's boys, but don't leave in the middle of convo...let her join us.
    GEEEEZZZZZZZZZ
     
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