Black Poetry : I Go

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Sep 13, 2008.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On automatic pilot I
    Go
    fathoms above, yet
    dredging below
    what I've come to know

    I go in between layers
    of thoughts so deep
    The highs of hope that cause joyous laughter
    and the lows of impossibilities that make me weep

    I'd imagine
    that my eyes go downward and to the left
    Like fall, yellow and green blend in with brown
    Settling into autumn, the spirit of summer, bereft

    Surprised that I don't go limp
    just pass out and go over yonder
    to another dimension, perhaps I could better get
    a grip upon all these thoughts that I ponder
    Maybe a different frequency would adjust me fonder

    And with all this
    It's a new day
    As I put my foot forward, ok not my best one
    Still, I attempt to find my way
    As I go....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    go forth as i tag along beside u putting forth my foot ....let's take dat stride
     
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    I think everyone is appointed their time and space...and nothing ever stays the same for long, as we each have our "New" day...that's just for us.
    So keep putting your best foot/either foot it dosen't matter as long as you keep moving your foot, it's when we grow tired and sit down...that the door/new day is right before us.
    ^5 ...on this piece sis!
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If each of us just keep striving somehow, we shall make it. Thank you Rich.
    The moment we stop could be the very moment of the new day that awaits, this is food for thought. Thank you much Sister queent.
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's just us in motion, today turning into tomorrow so fourth and so on, we all go, lets keep going until one day we look up, in the right place. that was a great piece, go and be blessed on the journey.
     
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    My goodness WATZ...
    you are truly blessed and talented!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ending up in the right place indeed Lataisha Nicole. Thank you for your kind words, and you be blessed as well.
    Brother Agabus, being the blessed talent that you are, I humbly thank you poet.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a HOT piece Watz I imagined that you reading this live with a nice upbeat in the background could be an extra plus to what is a really nice PICK ME UP AND GET STARTED kinda piece :) Truly enjoyed the read
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Trying to envision what you can here, sounds quite nice. Thank you triniti for your kind words.
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello Watz...

    Those words were deeply felt.

    I’m sure many of us have taken advantage of our “automatic pilot”
    every now and then to take the edge off, but the desire to get
    back in gear is what keeps of moving forward.


    Be blessed Sister-friend
    Coco