Black Poetry : I Gave A Part Of Myself

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  1. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And this is what he told me...
    I'm in the game gurl
    You know me
    Gotta provide for my sons, my moms, my sister
    I gotta keep that extra dollar
    And there's no time for you and me

    I told him I know you, son
    I know how you be
    I know you Muslim
    And it's just as hard for me

    He told me I don't want you to fall to deep in love with me
    Cuz you know that if we have children
    They're being raised by me
    And you know that we can't raise a family
    Together
    You know that we aren't going to be together for eternity
    So give your love to someone else
    Who's got what you need

    Cuz I'm not that someone
    I'm a nucklehead can't you see
    And I'm sorry
    I gave you a part of me

    And I said I'm sorry
    I gave you a part of me....
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep
     
  3. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx crazy situation fa real
     
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    adefinitediva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So deep . . . but I can definitely relate.
    Thanks for this one poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i feel dis deep thang here fo sho !
     
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    MissPoetik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    word... this is deep. i wrote something like this but, it was about my man cheating on me. all the while, the reader thinks that he's cheating with another woman but in the end you learn that the other woman is the streets...
     
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    Real nice....

    Heed the words, sister.

    Respect the brother for letting you know what the real is
    instead of stringing you along.

    You'll find the one that you were meant to be with.

    Peace.
     
  8. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    funny you guys should bring this one up i'm still working through the aftermath lol
    very sad ending
    but with a rewarding outcome lol
    well this is true indeed
    And now I share a part of you with me
    My poetry, floetry family
    Thanx for reading me i appreciate this
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as i replied in Lurk's peace..."let him go."

    other than that, this reads like a song worth hearing...

    nfinite...
     
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