Poetry Critiques : I FEEL YOU

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 1SensualBrotha, Jan 13, 2007.

  1. 1SensualBrotha

    1SensualBrotha Member MEMBER

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    I feel the softness of your succulent kiss,
    The warm hug that evokes perfect bliss,
    The tenderness of your beautiful smile,
    The essence of your femininity, grace and soulful style.
    I feel the fluidity and sway of your hips,
    The soft and gentle caress from your fingertips,
    The care and sincerity from the kindness of your heart,
    The thoughts and words of wisdom that you so often impart.
    I feel the brilliance and creativity of your beautiful mind,
    The chills you constantly send up and down my spine.
    The passion and fervor you express at night,
    The soft whispers in my ear when I hold you tight.
    I feel the warmth from your honey brown thighs,
    The desire when I look into your honey brown eyes.
    The breathless sighs and soulful cries
    As I feel your temperature steadily rise.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Very nicely done all you need now is a poetic book deal.....
     
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    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really like the descriptiveness that you use in your poem. It starts off in one rhythm and then by the end of the poem it's in a completely different rhythm...and that's the joy of writing freestyle poetry.
     
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    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You need a profession in captivating women's minds... Keep em coming:spinstar:

    :tennis:

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