Black Poetry : I feel left out...

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  1. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    out of this madness
    out of this crowd
    out of this love we share.

    I feel left out, because I'm not inside the inner circle of you yourself and your stuff.

    I feel left out of this house...because its your house filled with your things...you won't let me even buy a scatter cushion for your dead white designer couch " because it will mess with the decor theme of the house"

    Well you know what, I feel left out! So here it goes!
    I hate your furniture
    I hate your linen,
    I hate your taste in decor
    I hate your sanitary looking kitchen.
    I hate your surgery room looking bathrooms.
    and most of all, I hate your cooking!!

    Baby, can't we just move out of here. into a less expensive place that we can fill with rich mahogany reds, earthy greens and browns, colourful yellow and oranges to brighten up our love, or maybe we could get a purple bed with a green bedspread and pink pillows with purple embroidery and maybe we could get a red carpet and two silver chairs for us to put in the middle of our love nest?

    can't we just decorate our own house? With Sculptures from Africa and mats from Turkey and fill it with incense from India and eat with chop sticks from Thailand? baby, can't we fill this house with "us"

    Just thougth i would ask, because right now, feel left out!
     
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    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed the read on this "in your face" poem.

    Hmmm...a purple bed, now that's what I'm talkin' bout. Originality in writting with real subject content in this poem.
    Sistahs beware. Material thangs are nice, but a good man is better than all the stuff in the world...

    Baby, can't we just move out of here. into a less expensive place that we can fill with rich mahogany reds, earthy greens and browns, colourful yellow and oranges to brighten up our love, or maybe we could get a purple bed with a green bedspread and pink pillows with purple embroidery and maybe we could get a red carpet and two silver chairs for us to put in the middle of our love nest?

    Uhhh,
    Don't forget her cooking classes :)
     
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    Love the entire concept of this!

    Reas
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    poet feeling your yearning to break the norm

    go for yours and be happy
    even if you have to vacate

    DSS
     
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    coolness. liked it.

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    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wOw! So glad you all liked it...I wonder how many women feel this way....just thinking and spinning...spinningg....spinnning...around!!

    lo'
     
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    interesting...
    beautifully scripted.
    now
    allow me to play devils advocate
    IS IT NECESSARY TO MOVE IN ORDER FOR YOU TO BE....
    i mean
    AS LONG AS THE TWO OF YOU ARE TOGETHER...DOES IT REALLY MATTER...THE DECOR?
    hmmm...
    as long as i'm asking.
    are you talking about his house (yous house)
    or his heart?
    I JUST WANNA KNOW.:)

    YES...i loved it.
    TRUTH always make us THINK.

    THANK YOU.
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ohhhh yeah I like the way you

    put this down... don't feel left out though, brang yo stuff and mix it with his stuff even if he throw a hissy fit.





    One
     
  9. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baller, you are on!!! (hahaha...) okay,

    Let's look at it this way, when you go to a hotel, you feel a bit detached to the room right, I mean, its just a room? Now, imagine feeling the same way inside the house of someone your meant to be with? I mean clearly commitment calls for compramise?

    And even if his heart is in the right place, he's still selfish and that's coming between the couple...think about it...glad you enjoyed the read....Though I don't quite think I could pull of being the devil's advocate quite like you could!
     
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